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    my glass is shatterproof/ droppin lines harder than 2pac fallin' off a roof/ in the movie juice/ it's the truth/i'm swifty/ not livin a vest life like that cat 50/i dont have to many enemiies/ i'm monumental/ to beef with me is detrimental/physically or mentally with a pencil/it's that simple/ Idiom's very nimble/i'm quick witted like a nighthawk/makin bitches skip like to kids on a sidewalk/playin hopscotch/time to turn this verse up notch/tell me is time/ to drop a dime/ sending wack ass niggas into deep space 9/
    shifted into gear/makin your eyes tear/ fear appears/ on your facial expression/take a seat mutha fucka/let me teach you a lesson/it's a blessin in the skies/i'm on the rise/when you hear the devil stride it will hurt you inside/yo, it's time to blind some mindless cats/ like some blind mice/ i told you more than twice, that i really aint that nice/ time to slice and dice wit a ginsu knife/should i really end ya life?/ or is it really not that nice

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    Quote Originally Posted by Idiom
    my glass is shatterproof/ droppin lines harder than 2pac fallin' off a roof/ in the movie juice/ it's the truth/i'm swifty/ not livin a vest life like that cat 50/i dont have to many enemiies/ i'm monumental/ to beef with me is detrimental/physically or mentally with a pencil/it's that simple/ Idiom's very nimble/i'm quick witted like a nighthawk/makin bitches skip like to kids on a sidewalk/playin hopscotch/time to turn this verse up notch/tell me is time/ to drop a dime/ sending wack ass niggas into deep space 9/
    shifted into gear/makin your eyes tear/ fear appears/ on your facial expression/take a seat mutha fucka/let me teach you a lesson/it's a blessin in the skies/i'm on the rise/when you hear the devil stride it will hurt you inside/yo, it's time to blind some mindless cats/ like some blind mice/ i told you more than twice, that i really aint that nice/ time to slice and dice wit a ginsu knife/should i really end ya life?/ or is it really not that nice
    This needed a bit more imagery and content, but if it was jussa a rap with no particular direction then ku....My fav line was tha one highlighted.....

    Keep your sword sharp bruh, theres some decent swordsmen uppin here you could learn off.....


    peace

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    i appreciate the feed cousin...good lookin

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    Quote Originally Posted by Idiom
    makin bitches skip like to kids on a sidewalk/playin hopscotch/time to turn this verse up notch/tell me is time/ to drop a dime/ sending wack ass niggas into deep space 9/
    shifted into gear/makin your eyes tear/ fear appears/ on your facial expression/take a seat mutha fucka/let me teach you a lesson/it's a blessin in the skies/i'm on the rise/when you hear the devil stride it will hurt you inside/yo, it's time to blind some mindless cats/ like some blind mice/ i told you more than twice, that i really aint that nice/ time to slice and dice wit a ginsu knife/should i really end ya life?/ or is it really not that nice
    This area showed that you do have some talent with you style, and quite ingenuitive, don't get trapped in naming other well known artists in your lyrics!!! But if you work on that style above you can establish and express your self better with little difficulty. Maybe the first part (not quoted) was when you were starting the verse, but the one above stood out. Its a different style.

    Peace
    PS: Like to check more of your posts up in here, welcome.

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