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    Default Slim T's official thread

    Comment my work, I seriously want to become at least someone in th shadow of the greatest rappers. Truly appreciate all your comments. Peace.
    "The Devil is not the Prince of Matter; the Devil is the arrogance of the spirit, faith without smile, truth that is never seized by doubt. The Devil is grim because he knows where he is going, and, in moving, he always returns whence he came."

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    Default The presentation

    I don’ shoot rhymes till scoring kill, to prove myself y'all I'm real
    Cos still echo claims I ain't ill, shit worth less than a dollar bill,
    They don't see my rhymes be fucking everywhere around me
    So just proceed not to see, I'm revolution like Chuck D
    I'm really interested what y'all can do to me, fucking sue me
    'Cos maybe I'm not yet skilled as Genius, Nas and famous crews be
    I don't battle to get killed, I'm not shooting to be G
    I ain't got rifle, I'm hip-hop disciple, and still no one knows me
    I know I'll not become rap superstar just overnight,
    So I admit Denaturat was right when he said I ain't enuff tight,
    But be patient, gentlemen, watch a newcomer exercise,
    From a fucking old school copier to future hip-hop enterprise
    And I’m not quiet, listening lies from fucking liars I despise,
    Who ignore my message I scream in the sky making tries
    Not reading my posts on the forums, treating me as fucking moron,
    So I scream on them and cuss and spit my very first rhyme columns
    Meanwhile I brushing up my skills, wanting to see behind hills
    That are closing my views, waiting opportunity for first kill,
    I’m just being too fucking true, so forgive when my rhymes
    Make their repeat in same shit some two or more times,
    Peeps I assure you, when y’all gon’ see my first CD, it ain’t fucking crime,
    I already warned you on me, my breakthrough’s just a matter of time.
    "The Devil is not the Prince of Matter; the Devil is the arrogance of the spirit, faith without smile, truth that is never seized by doubt. The Devil is grim because he knows where he is going, and, in moving, he always returns whence he came."

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    ...just a matter of time...peace
    ...been hardcore since my Commodore



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    Default Heartz of Steel

    I was born in a village god-knows-where
    In a motherfucking killa season happening right there
    I was told that my father went to heaven next day,
    When he was fighting against cold steel to clear out our way
    And we all fleed to city, to live even more shitty,
    To run from basement to another, in the dark I was sitting
    When I got my first memory, a man looking black,
    With a gun in his hand, with some blood on his neck,
    Yeah it was a land attack, I don't know if he did fire,
    I seen mother's head next day hanging on barbed wire.
    When I was four years old, I learned what revenge means,
    From my first fired bullet, slugs flying my heart feels,
    At the age of eight, it was the first life I took,
    At the age of ten, I was the real street crook,
    My gang was all my age, we were savager than soldiers,
    We were loyal to our game, disorder we were holdin
    Robbin on every small store, motherfuck we were mobbin,
    If someone stepped on our way, next day his mother was sobbin,
    But it wasn't my mission, revenge was still beatin,
    And I had only her on my mind when my army was hittin,
    I knew it wasn't time yet, it wasn't time for me to get
    But you could bet, I watched the man I want so badly to wet,
    He became lord of war, riding around in his hummer,
    The most popular killer, his gun was sounding like drummer
    When spraying on people who were saving life 'fore him,
    His barrel never let him think bout his job as a sin…

    There's hell on earth, it's the only thing that is true,
    there's no need to die to make yourself motherfucking sure
    My spirit was chaotic, there ain't order, I ain't tried,
    I wanted just revenge, only the murder was on my mind
    While I was making my green, I never asked what's the kind
    Of the crime I was to make, who got the life I was to take
    I ain't got time for question, too much was on stake
    Cause my crew was hungry, I didn't want now to be cracked
    The time for action been wasted, I got reports what is being,
    The motherfucker I sentenced was heard to be fleeing
    On the way to sky haven I put my people on roadblock
    Probably similar to place where my old man got knocked off
    And I seen the fuckers coming, bullets flying I felt again,
    Three jeeps with MG's, I knew the middle was the main,
    But they was shooting on our place, firefight was now made,
    I was betrayed, my ambush gone off in a raid,
    My people dying, a boy was crying for his mother,
    And I was running 'fore bullets, I didn't think on other,
    Till I got trapped in a fucking blind street, one of million,
    And when my chasers arrived I wasn't thrilling, not anymore
    I just remembered many things that I missed to have
    And I thought bout my rotten body in unmarked grave
    When the bullets were ripping my dying flesh
    I was having blinking visions and a feeling of a flash
    I was thinking bout my woman that I never had
    I was thinking bout my friends who died for my bad
    I was thinking bout the people who died cause of me
    I was dying, motherfuck, did it really had to be?
    Was our fault this ring of death where's everybody caught,
    Are we fighting this bloodshed, is this what we sought,
    Is this death without reason really what WE will?
    Are we still living here, or our hearts became steel?

    (This is dedicated to my brothers in spirit from Lebanon, Iraq, Congo, Chechnya… and anywhere. I get'cha, people...)
    "The Devil is not the Prince of Matter; the Devil is the arrogance of the spirit, faith without smile, truth that is never seized by doubt. The Devil is grim because he knows where he is going, and, in moving, he always returns whence he came."

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    your honesty will serve you well and it's clear you have quite a lot on your mind in addition to some real stories to tell. I don't know how much advice I can give you having just started this myself but just keep at it. I don't know if you've heard it but check how the GZA comes on the Grandmasters CD with "Exploitation of Mistakes" might give you some ideas on how to take your words in a different direction to make it flow smoother while weaving your story at the same time.

    Killah Priest's "Science Projects"
    Killarmy "Full Moon"
    Anything by La tha Darkman....notables: "devil in a blue dress", "polluted wisdom".

    also....keep your head in the dictionary. load up like Malcolm X know what I mean?

    hope that helps.

    peace and good luck.

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    Thanx.
    "The Devil is not the Prince of Matter; the Devil is the arrogance of the spirit, faith without smile, truth that is never seized by doubt. The Devil is grim because he knows where he is going, and, in moving, he always returns whence he came."

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    the 1st 1 was like an intro........it was a good way to present your rhymes (thats probly y the name is there) the flow was nice 2

    the 2nd was real deep......liked the thought put into it....the story type scene was dope.....real good imagery....i can imagine everything ur spittin

    peace
    keep it up
    Battle-scarred shogun, explosion when my pen hits
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    -Inspectah Deck

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    Thanx for acclaims. I just wrote some new shit, a perfect way to spit out all my anger for being trapped in my old hood...
    "The Devil is not the Prince of Matter; the Devil is the arrogance of the spirit, faith without smile, truth that is never seized by doubt. The Devil is grim because he knows where he is going, and, in moving, he always returns whence he came."

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    Default When I Get Back

    I'm getting back at my old hood, happy that I could
    See that old concrete from childhood and decided that I should
    Get back, my rep, they gon know me like that
    Wit my unstoppable bomb-first, wit my knowledge be phat,
    To make my lost days avenge, leave 'em killed or damned,
    Shit, now it seems I hearing echo --"damn, things done changed"
    Where the people which I knew, where has done gone my own crew,
    Shit, is it fucking bunch of wiggers yellin "who is you? who is you?!"
    I lost the battle, they lost war, they lost all things worth fighting for,
    Now I'm T'Cha frontin loads of Nellies, 50's, maybe more
    Where's the man done given me my first CD from mighty Wu?
    I still imagine 'em screaming - check out - the W!!!!
    Now he's chillin wit some wankstas, self-proclaimed leader crew
    And a forgotten skinny Slim the only one screamin FUCK YOU!
    Shit, where gone places we used to go and thug and mack,
    Motherfucking sell-out, watch your ass when I get back

    Now what y'all bout to witness ain't an own hood diss,
    It's dedicated to the peeps I used to roll with, now I piss
    On every shot I got from knot that made my hell sprout out and fizz,
    Shizz, how I can't diss the hardest peep done gone sa-ta-nist?
    Well in my hood there ain't all good but always been some different breeds
    All for my needs, and all that's left from that big theft
    Is pile of shits, an ass to kiss and perfect diss that I'm right now rhymin'
    Well, my bomb is now set off, shit it's all bout that timin'
    But nevetherless, now I got back, but heart ain't beatin' in my chest
    When I'm supposed to hear the smartes one explainin' his new plans
    To tatoo "pimp" on his breast, shit, and he never smelled pussy
    Except prolly himself, now I regret I did'n get some Uzi
    To show them real word of crook, but they lost time to get to use it
    Or maybe I shall let them go and follow anthem - uh, just lose it
    Or prolly spill some fire and let them ask - man, shit, yo, what the heck??
    Shit they forgot me, but they gon know the word of when Slim gets back

    I got a story to tell, it's coming straightly from hell
    My mind is deep as a well, I wasting any that fell
    And I ain't show no regret to pussies made my hood blow
    Now it's just a place people sleep, they just come, eat and go,
    The land I used to rock now I met empty, shit that's a shock
    Because of pussies lost their mind and now is beating their last clock
    Nobody brings the pain, hell it's painful just to watch them lose
    Their last traces of mind sharpness on the bottom of a booze
    So I choose to fuck 'em up, but they didn't get my words
    From famous warred up crews they fell off to crunky ass herds
    So fuck all y'all! Slim got back to ruin your minds
    And you lost your last chance for defense gainst my rhymes
    You can cry "shit, it hurts", it's my aim, it ain't over
    And nothing can stop this killing, there ain't no deep cover,
    There ain't no safe area, your mommas what you lack,
    That's why y'all gon be killed as soon as I get back
    "The Devil is not the Prince of Matter; the Devil is the arrogance of the spirit, faith without smile, truth that is never seized by doubt. The Devil is grim because he knows where he is going, and, in moving, he always returns whence he came."

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    Default No Fighting

    You turn TV on, see them people fightin' for some freedom,
    You open can of beer and let your mind be filled wit wisdom,
    In your workplace, maybe factory the day was fucking killing,
    So you get to your home seeking for place for quiet chilling
    You live in projects, a ghetto, maybe in apartment,
    You may be Latino, black, in any case you are street hardened
    Your block can't be shell shocked, already it's enuff glocked
    And you are ducking at your quiet island to make your gun be cocked
    Again, well, sometimes you may be watchin struggling,
    Cuz around the world the people in worse shape than you who ruggin'
    You're eatin' your hot pizza while they be in their dark starvin'
    And you ain't nuthing guilty cause your first school was: "No fighting"

    Then you go out on street, watch them youngsters rollin' on their blunts
    Peer pressure high, so raise them substance level in their bloods
    You maybe ain't some junkie, your gun is really aimed for self-protection
    You may got dreams for life without dying of last injection
    You see your crew is waiting for you and you go on daily ride
    Your car is old, but you see nothing 'round you newer, right?
    You chillin' into spicy clouds of smoke comin' from your weed
    And you are thinking: "The life's fine, what more can I need?
    Who gives a fuck bout them rich crackers livin' some 10 miles away
    I don't, the life outside my old country motherfucking gay"
    You tell yourself your life is fine and you never keep on tying,
    Cause very first thing momma told you was the word "No fighting"

    You may be drawn into the army like half of your friends,
    Cause you are tough, young, poor, you don't look like a fiend
    You get your military training under a graduate from West Point
    Everyone heard of him like damn retarded rich daddy's son
    You may be sad, you write long sobby letters back to home,
    And your CO laughing at it in his office and you so lone
    You ask yourself once - damn, they really need ME down in Iraq
    But discipline in your unit quickly fills that little mind crack
    You fly in Hercules and get unloaded, Baghdad international,
    The state in your surrounding gets a bit too fractional,
    Your first mission - unmounted patrol into east suburb,
    The fire on you is starting right as you all get uncovered,
    Your man from squad got bullet in the middle of his head,
    Another slug got in your arm, time to think "Yo, that shit's bad"
    But then them terrorists surround you and get'cha captured
    They put you in front of dirty wall and they get ready all to shoot 'cha,
    And when you realize your West Point CO fleed the place, no timing,
    Before you die you'll realize how dumb was your "No fighting"
    "The Devil is not the Prince of Matter; the Devil is the arrogance of the spirit, faith without smile, truth that is never seized by doubt. The Devil is grim because he knows where he is going, and, in moving, he always returns whence he came."

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    Default Silent World

    Welcome to my world, where ain't everybody allowed
    To step into him, man, nothing here happens aloud,
    It's hard to get in, here ain't nothing changin',
    So be grateful that I let you single chance you'll have to get in,
    See you live on the surface of this planet of green,
    In the, maybe, unlucky place, but it has always been so
    Appreciate your time that is given by me,
    In the middle of pure-hearted people, workers and G's,
    Between patriots and judges, fathers and their families,
    Every element of only world that you know that there is,
    But see, it's fake world, just a theater for me,
    While I live in the REAL world, the only that means
    My world exclusive club, only for power fiends,
    You must be born ta participate our quiet meetings,
    To be a part of the court of underworld empire,
    Secure from any cruelty, protected from any fire
    And only people who know formula are able to get in
    To the silent world of people who renounced own dreams
    The soundless elevators, taking you ever lower
    To the door of easy life, wealth, money and power

    Two words whispered in a phone and world moves,
    And every action you gon take is for me one more prove
    That my word gets more money in devilish short time
    Than you'll ever get as working shit during your life
    In my discretely shady club that I call working room
    My hand writes few words which you'll feel damn soon,
    And you'll never know who made your life fall into ruins,
    Cuz your struggle to open my door is completely damn useless
    You a mortal, you don't know even my word exist,
    And when you see my face in public you don't raise your fist,
    My words are bout justice, moral, law when you see on TV
    And you will never know what is the deeper meaning of shit…
    My money's made on death, life, power, respect
    On the cancer you have, on the image you reflect
    I make my green on crack fiends, killings and wars,
    The food you eat, on your wish to get girls and cars,
    And I quetly laugh watching your everyday struggle,
    Watching your tired faces, hearing the words that you mumble

    Sometimes you have strange feeling that there is somethting deeper
    But then you'll stop thinking, maybe you'll become oversleeper,
    And that's my will, my way to protect my own back,
    Capitalizing on your struggle, on the power you lack
    Well, no more words, you don't understand what you heard.
    Son, door is closed. Get back. To your fake world.
    "The Devil is not the Prince of Matter; the Devil is the arrogance of the spirit, faith without smile, truth that is never seized by doubt. The Devil is grim because he knows where he is going, and, in moving, he always returns whence he came."

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    Any feedback?
    "The Devil is not the Prince of Matter; the Devil is the arrogance of the spirit, faith without smile, truth that is never seized by doubt. The Devil is grim because he knows where he is going, and, in moving, he always returns whence he came."

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    good shit, deep sense lots of emotions.....try n develope rhyme schemes
    like example

    color in
    fluttering

    ^^notice how the syllables match, your shit would sound dope like that

    peace, and pop in on my thread

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    Fo sho Slim !
    Straight from the motherfuckin heart, i can dig this shit !! for real !!
    Keep it real homie,

    Peace


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    Default 1001 Night of Slaughter

    A great general before invasion said to his soldiers:
    »We gon land, we gon fight, y'all need to go bolder
    Ya need to send to hell any unknown gun holder,
    No surrender, show no mercy, make’em go ever colder,
    Cuz he killed your comrades, your brother in arms,
    And if he wants to surrender I order to fill’em with slugs,
    He must die! – In the liver you gotta stick him,
    Between his third and fourth rib you take your knife and then rip him,
    You gotta do as I said, you gotta boast your killer instinct
    We gotta make our name as killers, then he gonna flee this,
    We gon find the killer’s name and this killer be immortal,
    When our enemy finds out who we are he’ll run always,
    So when you land you gotta shoot, - you gotta hit him
    You gotta walk in blood to knees, I’ll shoot any that’s sittin...”

    And now we open our newspapers and we can’t understand,
    Another town to basement torn of that fuckin’ murder band
    Every day the same story, the damage is collateral,
    And hatred towards battledress is now more multilateral
    How come? Them killers! (What?) Them murderers goddamn,
    They got their war objectives and they ain’t them fuckin Nazi brand,
    But they be actin’ like – let’s say – kinda massacre machine,
    And then we raisin’ our fists cause they warriors look bad, grim
    Then we go on demonstrations, burn US flags,
    But we ain’t seen a five-star uniform in fire of our rage,
    But what to do to him? He prolly in the staff now sittin,
    Showin objectives on TV, uncomprehensible he shittin’
    He tells us bout democracy and the soldier heroism,
    He speaks about them darksides as a nigga bout Peronism,
    And we won’t remember of him on the Nimitz as a fucking shouter:
    “Don’t be fucking pussies, you up here for some party slaughter...”
    "The Devil is not the Prince of Matter; the Devil is the arrogance of the spirit, faith without smile, truth that is never seized by doubt. The Devil is grim because he knows where he is going, and, in moving, he always returns whence he came."

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