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    Default Enter the Shogun

    Ma rhymes,ma technik,makes ya feel agony.
    Cause ya now a victim of ma tyranny.
    Make ya feel pain for all eternity.
    Cause Im an ancient evil divinity.

    Ma order,the Black Shadow Disciples.
    Rip thru ya rhymes jus like ur principles.
    cause they weak like beyond compare.
    And that weakness make ya feel despair.

    We use shurikens and ninja swords,
    as if we were Deadly Ninja Lords.
    Pray to ya god for protection,
    Bitch,now u in need of Divine intervention
    Cause ya aint gonna survive the infection,
    caused by our venom sword intersection,

    Here come the Shadow Shogun,flyin silently
    The weapon of choice,the Livin Blade,cuts efficiently
    Leavin ya in the dust,a dim worthless memory
    Victim to deadly Ninjutsu weaponry.



    Pls comment on this cuz i need help!

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    Default Re: Enter the Shogun

    it's straight, I felt it could have grabbed more attention though

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    Default Re: Enter the Shogun

    You have a wild imagination!!!!!!!!!!!
    But it was cool,simple. Keep posting.

    Peace

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    Default Re: Enter the Shogun

    To be honest, I'm feeling at best the last 4 lines

    You need to check if words really rhyme, you know what I mean?
    Look at my nephew, he jumped at the window just to see you (The Sun - Ghostface, Rza, Raekwon and Slick Rick)

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    Default Re: Enter the Shogun

    yea, i dig ya dawg
    Divine intervention aint a protection against Ninjutsu poison pen infection

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