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    Moonday to Sunday
    Sun brings
    doomsday down runway
    there's one way
    the Sun way
    or gun way
    Sun superior with gunplay
    craft apocolypse in one day
    Scriptures of the Sun say:
    "He has risen
    to banish all forbidden
    slithering savages
    of unrighteous living"
    I am to tired to complete this
    End trasmission of thesis

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    no offence, but when i firsted looked at it after reading the topic.... i LMMFAO!!!!!
    hahhahaha...

    nice poem?

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    Default Re: tired (and still Superior)

    You're going to need to expound more on that!!!! But the rhythm was there. The rhymes where to custom. It doesn't seem to show your own skill. And you kept direct to the most obvious. Nice try, but doesn't leave many with anything to think about. Keep posting

    Peace
    PS: Work on your technique.

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    Need I a reply on how fly I kick it ?
    Tight like old Levis on fat guy pocketing a chicken.
    This diction induces painful inflictions.
    Speech that sparked the Big Bang from verbal friction.
    I spit the most salivating sativa
    Fresh indica, clean 2000 Lever
    Got me an Outkast type fever
    I'm the one that paved the path of that leader.
    While most just follow and need role models
    I spread like water in bottle, or the tip that's hollowed
    Be my name. Be you same. No chain.
    Just flame, a lil propane, plus this game
    I call it burning the churches.
    Hurting the worthless.
    Receptions of curses.
    Death is my only purpose.
    These are my nusery rhymes. Wait untill you grow.
    Then the meat cometh in form you will not know.
    That's that hidden hand crushing your hidden gland.
    I move in a forbidden land immersed in a hidden sand.
    Understand that most are stood upon.
    This sing along leaves mic stands Cheeched and Chonged.
    And I am still smoking
    This is my southern barbicue.
    I am the Dirt in the South
    The knower of the Why in You.
    Last edited by exiquio; 04-08-2006 at 08:47 PM.

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    i jus read ur first will read second later. it confused me tbh but i enjoyed it in a weird way lol!

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    when I typed the first one I had a point but I don't know what the fuck it was. I just looked up my post and noted the little critism and posted the second verse as a reply. Kind of stupid. But so be it.

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