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    Default a little poem I wrote

    im here stuck inside a box, swallowed mind and body whole,

    in a casket which to me dont seem to be so confertalble,
    a slumber pool of endless dreams unschemed ,
    at least thats what the bilble says' when i pleadged my whole alegiance during life and asked forgivnees at my death, noww, its how we lived that god reflects.
    considered a good samaritan who casualy has sex,
    yet knowin upstairs someones watchin you swapped through ten religious options,
    caution'this can also lead to demons swindling black doctrines.
    well atleast its how it seemed you let the beast asume control,
    shoveled out the good emotion and left you with this bitter soul, no winners known???????
    news%unspoken #words

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    Default Re: a little poem I wrote

    Nice verse, it had one thinking. It seemed to contain a lot of hidden pain or situations that cannot be left alone. But nice flow and content of lyrics. It wasn't the usual bible stuff although
    was heavily based on such a concept.

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