once upon a time in shaolin - buy the book now!
Results 1 to 12 of 12

Thread: bizzlez thread

  1. #1
    Very Young To Hip-Hop bizzlez's Avatar
    Join Date
    Feb 2007
    Location
    Formerly Long Island
    Posts
    146
    Rep Power
    0

    Default bizzlez thread

    EDIT: I know the subject changes near the middle, but I can never think straight.

    my raps on paper be looking symmetrical
    haters only ride my cock cause its indispensable
    schizophrenic and still polarizing clicks
    besides your rapping ain't even an F on ink
    more like an incomplete son
    rob an kill with the same sword I'm Attila The Hun
    I just try an elevate through diversity
    same time make peace with all of my adversary's
    nothing new can surprise me I'm from the future
    the past the present and the womb of a mother
    better start motoring that clump of dirt in your head
    the devils on the move trying to break bread
    during Bruce Lee's era people said my skin was yellow
    I'm not cruel or unusual quite the regular fellow
    smoked just feel happy get out of that terrible mood
    walking around school eating hard earned payed for food
    not giving a damn spitting out the pills
    just to be sorta ill with a quiet demeanor for the thrill
    sitting back in the classroom thinking without action
    an if I wanted to be labeled I'd put on the caption
    My name starts with the letter "B," so I came up with bizzlez.

  2. #2
    The Lyrical Anomaly Snow chainz's Avatar
    Join Date
    Jun 2004
    Location
    Batlimore,MD
    Age
    32
    Posts
    531
    Rep Power
    14

    Default

    come down with schizophreniah not long ago but never mind that
    nice shit you might be a good battler.

  3. #3
    Very Young To Hip-Hop bizzlez's Avatar
    Join Date
    Feb 2007
    Location
    Formerly Long Island
    Posts
    146
    Rep Power
    0

    Default

    smoking weed because I needed a confidence booster
    never spoke the truth, became a hypocrite and a loser
    was a quiet kid all throughout myself even in my head
    a life of pain and sadness, feelings softer then bread
    thought I was hardcore until I looked at the reflections
    got a vice for dead presidents sabotaging the elections
    don't bother with the middleman I'm at the bottom
    thought I was ready for death until I heard the war drums
    mentally I'm as big as an elephant, but life and deaths the mice
    never heated enough to grab the heat, my breaths cold as ice
    My name starts with the letter "B," so I came up with bizzlez.

  4. #4
    Very Young To Hip-Hop bizzlez's Avatar
    Join Date
    Feb 2007
    Location
    Formerly Long Island
    Posts
    146
    Rep Power
    0

    Default

    (no message)
    Last edited by bizzlez; 02-22-2007 at 11:16 PM.
    My name starts with the letter "B," so I came up with bizzlez.

  5. #5
    Very Young To Hip-Hop bizzlez's Avatar
    Join Date
    Feb 2007
    Location
    Formerly Long Island
    Posts
    146
    Rep Power
    0

    Default

    this is probably garbage, what I'm gonna type up, but I'm tired as fuck and can't fall asleep. and hopefully practice makes better.

    this kid writing ran off to Hell cause the worlds flat
    afraid of the tribulation of Heaven cause I saw alot
    stereotyping wishing violence some day will stop
    poison in my mind comes as frequently as the rain drops
    killing my hope to reach Jesus with every step I make
    depressions a murderer, to me just the icing on the cake
    floatin' between life an death, skating infinitely on thin ice
    the insecurities I gots been my only vice, needing advice
    my reflections began growing ripples since an early age
    as the compliments began to hit me I only saw an ugly face
    might as well stab my belly and act out the grim reaper
    reality hit me before my age did, slipped as a dreamer
    as I grew and moved on to another state of mind
    continued to clutch to the past looking for love I'd call mine
    but ain't coming from the heart, the surroundings grayish
    some days I would just drown in my blanket
    lay in my bed day dreaming about all the things I should of done
    nothing in the airs pleasant, should of just popped my lungs
    everybody's telling me I need a reality check
    its all about how many zeros you can't count on the check
    greedily grabbed the liquor, for a pleasing sensation
    never took the medicine cause the easing temptation
    smoking weed with family, toting a new personality
    but belonged in a psych evaluation cause a few uneven quality's
    Last edited by bizzlez; 02-23-2007 at 12:24 AM.
    My name starts with the letter "B," so I came up with bizzlez.

  6. #6
    The ABBOTT noel411's Avatar
    Join Date
    Jun 2003
    Location
    Australia
    Age
    35
    Posts
    5,569
    Rep Power
    54

    Default

    Wasn't feeling the first half of the first verse. The second half was better though. The second verse you posted was pretty good. And the last verse you posted was good stuff. I can relate to a lot of what you're saying. Some of this stuff is good, thoughtful poetry. Well worth the read in the case of the last verse, and the other 2 have their moments too. Keep at it.


    THE LORD noel411 HAS A NEW ALBUM OUT!!! Czech it out here...

    http://www.wutang-corp.com/forum/sho...80#post2575080

    Suck this drunk alcohol dick.

  7. #7
    Very Young To Hip-Hop bizzlez's Avatar
    Join Date
    Feb 2007
    Location
    Formerly Long Island
    Posts
    146
    Rep Power
    0

    Default

    for fun. I wanna see if a former suburban kid now rural kid can talk about killing and stuff...probably suck balls though

    roll down the block window down in a stolen vehicle
    push meth like grocery carts sparking miracles
    pedestrians walk all alone like they packing heat
    not the dance floor, kids breaking clapping at they feet
    murder my friends and rob my enemies of they riches
    kids claim they hard toting guns but wired like stitches
    never met my blood family so I ran like the mob
    .....

    I'm gonna stop now with the experiment

    ---------------------------

    my crew stay chopping wood like we in the woodlands
    cruising down ya boulevard while you soiling ya pants
    like Robocop, don't mess with my metal, lose lose situation
    treating ya boo boo's while my mental bruises ya condition
    the general disrespects ya ass in the battle like a Rainman
    you claim you hot, you drinking the bubbly after shakin soda cans
    crews glue tight like elmers washables, yours ran an deserted
    my punches ain't playing, the verbalism hurts kids
    blow for blow I stay awake like I'm on a coffee brake
    punching myself in a straight jacket, easily insane

    Thought as I fast as I could typing up shit. But I have a very short train of thought.
    Last edited by bizzlez; 02-25-2007 at 06:04 PM.
    My name starts with the letter "B," so I came up with bizzlez.

  8. #8
    Very Young To Hip-Hop bizzlez's Avatar
    Join Date
    Feb 2007
    Location
    Formerly Long Island
    Posts
    146
    Rep Power
    0

    Default

    Is this gangsta rap?

    I've never experienced hardcore shit my entire life of living in New York (Long Island). Just want to to know if what I'm about to freestyle/keystyle is hardcore, or whatever. I can hardly identify this stuff when its on the radio.

    murder your whole crew with one pillow on they faces
    sit back relax, hand on the cup with you tyeing my laces
    haters, fakers, and psychos come to play with my army
    the great Leonardo da Vince couldn't portray what I see
    puffing smoke against ya house, timber! motherfucker
    fuck with me on the prowl? I'd eat you like Hannibal Lector
    loaded your body with enough heat to create dew
    just remember guppy, its a bitch who made you

    make fun of as much as you'd like too

    I'm out.
    My name starts with the letter "B," so I came up with bizzlez.

  9. #9
    The ABBOTT noel411's Avatar
    Join Date
    Jun 2003
    Location
    Australia
    Age
    35
    Posts
    5,569
    Rep Power
    54

    Default

    I much prefer the personal stuff you wrote. There's nothing wrong with writing some gangsta type shit for a bit of fun, but personally it's not gonna hold my attention when reading it.


    THE LORD noel411 HAS A NEW ALBUM OUT!!! Czech it out here...

    http://www.wutang-corp.com/forum/sho...80#post2575080

    Suck this drunk alcohol dick.

  10. #10
    Very Young To Hip-Hop bizzlez's Avatar
    Join Date
    Feb 2007
    Location
    Formerly Long Island
    Posts
    146
    Rep Power
    0

    Default

    I had no idea you're from Australia, just read under your name

    ---------------------------

    sometimes it seems like living to me is just a dream
    life's Hell and karma's a bitch, all part of God's scheme
    verbalism hits the con artists harder then vice versa
    didn't steal and the Devil tried to entice me to murder
    Hell's labors my reflection on the rippled water working for free
    my own limitations take the word crippled further to me
    insecurities began in 2nd grade to do with self image
    walking through life at a slow pace and realities hitting
    I know others suffer more but its so hard not to express
    finally glued together the mirror and only saw a mess
    My name starts with the letter "B," so I came up with bizzlez.

  11. #11
    Very Young To Hip-Hop bizzlez's Avatar
    Join Date
    Feb 2007
    Location
    Formerly Long Island
    Posts
    146
    Rep Power
    0

    Default

    trying to raise my battle shit. just quick shit

    mugging cats on their own street cause the king arrived
    you can talk about your bling, bling you won't survive
    freezing cats easily without hesitation I'm the winter
    tension building, got an invitation from the winner
    you a lame left in pieces, the psycho aims and squeezes
    after your cream, the reason you had fame for just fifteen
    the dons got a few words for you, up your arsenal
    your soul ain't matter because I done bucked particles
    you can dodge my bullets, keep it moving gravy dude
    just fire back like retarded arsonists aiming at you
    My name starts with the letter "B," so I came up with bizzlez.

  12. #12
    "Come as you are" Bigot Hitman's Avatar
    Join Date
    May 2006
    Location
    Cincinnati, walnut hills
    Age
    27
    Posts
    2,165
    Rep Power
    15

    Default

    ^ gotta fix a couple lines like the closer, but u stepped up alittle on this little verse, 7/10
    The dealer of hope is selling me lies
    Reasons to live are reasons to die, in disguise
    This life was never mine, the rivers never ran
    Cross your arms, its too late for helping hands
    Spit your pity elsewhere, there's no sympathy needed
    For one who's never alive, for one who's never completed (Bigot Hitman)
    http://www.wutang-corp.com/forum/sho...=25482&page=61

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •