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    Default A Short Diss Verse At Current Popular Rap Songs (Mainstream)

    diss at songs like- walk it out, fly high, sexy back, chicken noodle soup, and make it rain...fuck those retards!!!

    you wanna walk it out i'll trip you
    outline you in chalk, and have you zippered covered hovered by wool
    andre 3000, 3000 represent the degrees by which i burned u to ashes
    jim jones ur honeys poked it out they got no asses
    raw sex bust ur nut, now whos ballin??
    dumbass sexy still alive as long as im livin
    im so sick and ill i make you throw up
    so you prescribe the chicken noodle soup huh
    and dance your way out as i shoot at your feet
    all your make it rain words, son i bring the heat
    so dont worry bout the cloudy weather
    i shoot more than a hunter, and i bust feathers
    no more albums like the 36 no more

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    anyone got suggestions? im still tryin to work my style
    no more albums like the 36 no more

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    Quote Originally Posted by MX1 View Post
    anyone got suggestions? im still tryin to work my style
    I suggest getting hold of Aquemini

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    Quote Originally Posted by MX1 View Post
    diss at songs like- walk it out, fly high, sexy back, chicken noodle soup, and make it rain...fuck those retards!!!

    you wanna walk it out i'll trip you
    outline you in chalk, and have you zippered covered hovered by wool
    andre 3000, 3000 represent the degrees by which i burned u to ashes
    jim jones ur honeys poked it out they got no asses
    raw sex bust ur nut, now whos ballin??
    dumbass sexy still alive as long as im livin
    im so sick and ill i make you throw up
    so you prescribe the chicken noodle soup huh
    and dance your way out as i shoot at your feet
    all your make it rain words, son i bring the heat
    so dont worry bout the cloudy weather
    i shoot more than a hunter, and i bust feathers
    leave andra out of this hes not hip hop he funk

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    i got aquemini but jus like mobb deep (used to be poppin) hes weak now (just my opinion) bak then he was dope but i dont like wut he been involved wit
    no more albums like the 36 no more

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    Quote Originally Posted by MX1 View Post
    i got aquemini but jus like mobb deep (used to be poppin) hes weak now (just my opinion) bak then he was dope but i dont like wut he been involved wit
    U obvioulsy don't know what he means by aquemini
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    its one of outkasts cd's classic album

    best track da art of storytellin' pt. 2
    no more albums like the 36 no more

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    I didn't think u knew, cuz u was sayin "he's weak now" as if outkast, or mobb deep for that matter, was one person an not a two-man group.
    The dealer of hope is selling me lies
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    Spit your pity elsewhere, there's no sympathy needed
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    naw i knew i'm jus a funny speaking nigga lol
    no more albums like the 36 no more

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    Quote Originally Posted by SpOk3N View Post
    andre never fell off, for one thing. second, why diss them? if you're gonna go at andre and make it rain, at least have something to back it up. improve the simple wordplay...try to grasp a flow. andtry to improve the structure as well. holler.
    word, I firmly believe Andre can still rap his ass off. I like that he's got the balls to say " you know fuck it, I'm gettin bored with the same ol' same ol', I wanna do something else" and then go out and do it. For a lot of artist that's a move they're not willing to make. When "hey ya" dropped, he's was talkin about some real shit but he pulls it off as a dance song, have people bouncin in the club to a break up song. Kinda like Maxwell Silverhammer in its poppy subversion. Its like an inside joke that only people who listen to lyrics will understand.



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    that verse u posted sounds like summit 50 cent would bring out....commercial


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    It was decent, work on your flow and incorporate more multies, good ideas though

    and andre 3000 is the shit still

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    bad.

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    Quote Originally Posted by MX1 View Post
    diss at songs like- walk it out, fly high, sexy back, chicken noodle soup, and make it rain...fuck those retards!!!

    you wanna walk it out i'll trip you
    outline you in chalk, and have you zippered covered hovered by wool
    andre 3000, 3000 represent the degrees by which i burned u to ashes
    jim jones ur honeys poked it out they got no asses
    raw sex bust ur nut, now whos ballin??
    dumbass sexy still alive as long as im livin
    im so sick and ill i make you throw up
    so you prescribe the chicken noodle soup huh
    and dance your way out as i shoot at your feet
    all your make it rain words, son i bring the heat
    so dont worry bout the cloudy weather
    i shoot more than a hunter, and i bust feathers
    U had a couple descent play on words, or wordplay, but nuthin that jumped out. The flow was bad for the first 5 or 6 lines, after that it seemed to flatten out, and even up alittle. I personally don't like the topic/concept becuz of the rappers/songs u chose to take ur shots at, which were kinda on the weak side. Just because rappers are mainstream, doesn't mean that their not makin good hip hop. U gotta get the styles of southern, west coast, east coast, and mid west rap before u speak on them. I'll admit that jim jones isn't a very good mc at all, but most of the other guys/songs u commented on weren't neccesairly bad or "retarded" as u put it. Just party music bra, that's what the majority of people want to hear. And if my ends depended on makin these songs i would too. Plus its not like their spittin wack over these songs anyways ya know. overall: 6.5/10
    The dealer of hope is selling me lies
    Reasons to live are reasons to die, in disguise
    This life was never mine, the rivers never ran
    Cross your arms, its too late for helping hands
    Spit your pity elsewhere, there's no sympathy needed
    For one who's never alive, for one who's never completed (Bigot Hitman)
    http://www.wutang-corp.com/forum/sho...=25482&page=61

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    personally i dont like andre, but u can disagree or wutever but i just dont like the nigga all that much...thanks for the suggestions to my niggas cuz i need sum practice kno im sayin and shit...and those songs i chose or wutever are just that songs popular that i could choose, tho personally i dont like any of em...peace and 1 luv
    no more albums like the 36 no more

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