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    check out this new track. give me honest and constructive criticism.

    jus a song for my EP, might record the second verse again

    link is in my sig

    peace

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    Very very nice lyrics son. A real poetic vibe.
    "A lost soul wanders days lone
    future spaceghosts... searching faith and hope"

    PEACE

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    Nice beat, could you "sharpen" the drum-line a bit, Shitao? Would hit it in total, then! Good job as always

    to Winte: incredible lyrics, you try to speak clearly, nice UK-accent and constant flow; proper quality in sound
    I know it's hard but I think you could put more atmosphere in your raps, you know, a bit more aggressive, a touch of transiency
    but I like this track, no doubt

    The other tracks on your page are decent, too!!
    - Young dove: nice vibe you got there
    - Way of the shadow: raw and heavy, beat's well produced - the 2nd verse's acca should be mixed again
    - Video gamez: again a raw track, good MC feature (graveyard)
    - Hope: crazy instrumental, aggressive rap
    ...
    I think there's always a 3rd vers missing, these are too short in my feeling
    Saying this, I don't want to disrespect you (I'm no better) but I want you to get forward because I like your stuff!
    Keep up your style, keep up your text-work, keep up your productions
    Those are really underground and fresh - props
    Look at my nephew, he jumped at the window just to see you (The Sun - Ghostface, Rza, Raekwon and Slick Rick)

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    Ahhhhh Word, So Ur The Killa Falcon Dat Worked W/ My Bretheren Graveyard Shifter, Nice Ass Track U Got Here Yo, Big Ups To Shitao On Da Production , Rhymes Is Bangin On Da Real, Mad Deepness In The Words, I Like Dat Shit Word Up. Keep It Comin Yo

    Peace And War
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    Very nice and somber, maybe you could distinguish a chorus in some part in the middle, i know its not the final mix probably but just a suggestion, dope tho PEACE

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    this was one of my favourite shitao beats.
    killer falcon is one of my favourite mcs from the internet.
    the result is great. hehe...really good

    -maybe the volume of the beat should be a bit increased. kf's flow matches verry good the measures and everything.
    i really would comment more upon this song...but i like it how it is.
    peace

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    thanks a lot for the feedback everyone. i'll learn from what you've said. thanks to all who checked it out

    peace

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    aiyo killer falcon my man! i listen to you a lot dude

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    For my man Killer Falcon.....UP

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    very nice job..up...


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    very nice job..up.........


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