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    Default Intellektual Verse

    I'm Ahead Of The Age, I'll Sustain My Place, And Your Pages Will Remian Blank Untill I've Re-Written Your Time Frame
    From Then On, Every Scripture And Rhyme I Spit Will Be Laced With A Mache 5 Turbo Auqa Gauge
    You Fuckface, I'll Shove Your Head Back In Place, Rewind Your Days, And Turn You Back To Your Microscopic State
    For Heavens Sake Forsake Your Fate, Hang You Upside Down In Space For Hell's Bate
    My Best Trait, My Thoughts Travel At A Furious Rate, Display A Mirror And Double Till It Breaks
    This Shit I Create, Is Beyond Your Beef, To Good For A Plate, A Fuckin Miriacle That'll Make Your Mind Ache
    A Tension To When I Speak, Makes The Air Vibrate, More Of That Then An Earthquake
    Judge With Seramics, If I Catch You, Its Automatic, Strait Irratic The Verbal Killer Fanatic
    A Great Flows Abstract, Like Money Im The Nasdaq, U Give Slack And I'll Snatch Your Gat
    Rip The Jack The Massacre's Back, 2 Hooks And A 151 Flask, Boiling Blood Uner A Flesh Mask
    Your Shits Shrap, I'll Mesh Your Trash, Paybacks A Bitch, In Fact If You Have Brains You Know Better The To Snitch
    Quit Actin Like You Stack Bricks, Only Powder You've Seen Is The Kind Your Mom Smacks Your Ass Wtih
    So Dont Act Up, U Think Your A Bully? You Dont Know The Meaning Even If I Showed You A Goats Head A Pentagram And Pirates Skully
    7th Scorned With Horns, Born With Torns, Spit Thorns Its Like Fuckin You Over Ina Corn Field Shottin A Porno Film

    - - - - - - meh thats it....peace


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    Default Re: Intellektual Verse

    Quote Originally Posted by Intellekt
    My Thoughts Travel At A Inferior Rate
    dude u know what inferior means, shiiit son, thats goin in tha sig lil brotha

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    Default Re: Intellektual Verse

    i thought it meant unstoppable, i think i mean furious then


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    Default Re: Intellektual Verse

    inferior is like unwanted, not good

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    Default Re: Intellektual Verse

    Quote Originally Posted by akabobbyd
    inferior is like unwanted, not good
    yeh..many terms, i thought Inferior was like a verb for furious, I WAS WORNG, drop it,

    i wanna hear some real feed please


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    Default Re: Intellektual Verse

    lol, i was just saying, but imo the rhymes are good the first line is the best to me

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    lyrically it was good. the first 3 lines were tightest, i could find the rhythm easily. the only problem with your verse (and i've noticed it with other ones too) is that its hard to really pick up the rhythm or flow because your lines are very long. it makes it hard to figure out where one bar finishes and the next one begins. this is especially confusing considering some of your verse structure. no diss, this is just constructive criticism. keep up the good work.

    peace

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    Default Re: Intellektual Verse

    Quote Originally Posted by Intellekt
    i thought it meant unstoppable, i think i mean furious then


    HAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAH CLASSIC!!!

    PEACE
    a.k.a. The Difference saying check out my 1st video


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    Default Re: Intellektual Verse

    Quote Originally Posted by Skale
    dude u know what inferior means, shiiit son, thats goin in tha sig lil brotha
    haha no doubt....hope u dun mind me doin tha same

    PEACE
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    Default Re: Intellektual Verse

    Quote Originally Posted by winte
    lyrically it was good. the first 3 lines were tightest, i could find the rhythm easily. the only problem with your verse (and i've noticed it with other ones too) is that its hard to really pick up the rhythm or flow because your lines are very long. it makes it hard to figure out where one bar finishes and the next one begins. this is especially confusing considering some of your verse structure. no diss, this is just constructive criticism. keep up the good work.

    peace
    well, my bar pattern is different the norm i guess, wehn i rap it in my head, its like my brain produces its own beat to go perfect with bar pattern, lol, i switch it up too also, yeh it hink i need to type it better, but when im freestlyin i dont pay attention how i type......

    peace thanks for the feed back


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    Default Re: Intellektual Verse

    nice verse. reminds me of copywrite.
    If I Offend You .. Fuck You I Intend To ..

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    Default Re: Intellektual Verse

    LOL i was listeing to Theme Music then a Jakki track when i wrote this....


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    Default Re: Intellektual Verse

    Ha hahaahaha ...You Sonned ya self

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    Default Re: Intellektual Verse

    i know what i meant tho..! XD


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    Default Re: Intellektual Verse

    Quote Originally Posted by Intellekt
    LOL i was listeing to Theme Music then a Jakki track when i wrote this....
    thats a copywrite track, GET IT RIGHT!

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