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    Default What you think off these bars

    I start the bars my pen goes automatic
    Touch the stars through dreams and more than tactics
    Get my swagga through all the graphics
    Don't trip and stagger like a guy with daggers and axes
    Soldiers who bustle, tussel, hustle, struggle like smackdown
    You no you gonna back down in the back ground where I put my rap down
    What's that now, we feel the holocaust
    Obsticles, binoculars, the life cycle to do with the philosophers
    Prosperous 7 ring octopus
    We charge down like a rhinoserous
    I'm a veteran still going up a rank
    Taking out tanks with my bare hands untill the world war blank
    End of crematorium close the curtains
    Coffee stiring opened up like a surgeon I'm not carrying your burden
    I'm a ledgend in my own strategy
    Hold soldiers up untill the end of the calamity
    Let the bacon sizzle in the pan
    Get down throw a whole missle at your clan
    Untill your shit goes bang and clang
    Then your whole army starts screaming man down !
    We going global in the continents
    Prodominence we prominent straight up with the confidence
    No documents we feel the opulence
    We gamble the sample and live with the consequence
    Rims on the benz feeling suspense
    Protection fortification in our defence
    But it's not enough if we can take lead and succeed
    Unless we can take lead and succeed in peace

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    It was irright b-boy yo lets battle.

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    i felt content was lacked for multisyllable rhymes chemes in the begining... some structural errors possibly... lagged toward the middle to end...flow was on point for the middle... keep at it...

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    U have potential to be ill just keep writing.
    Spound better than alot of mainstream fiends.



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    Quote Originally Posted by J.T.S. View Post
    U have potential to be ill just keep writing.
    Spound better than alot of mainstream fiends.
    agreed cha lyrics were on-point but ya structural errors and lacked many multis

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