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    5 bars
    best of 3 votes win
    no dickriding or crew votes etc

    just a short quick battle, 2-0 is a KO.


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    the prince beheads the cowardice of malcontents and weaklins
    brisk sword motions bends the neck and pops the head to the ceiling

    weaving potions that i grope on your membrane and unleash acid
    spilling your fluids into a glass and keeping your head on my wall plasted

    another victim at the end of my decisions, watching him sleep then kill with precision
    filling his dream with the thought of fools, then disecting his imagery with primitive tools

    u may be sleeping but its time to rise- im creeping in your house cutting phone wires
    use the same pliars and unlatch your lock, then spit fire and stain your mind with hock

    i stop. sweep away the debris and whatever is left
    another death from the depth of a poet's stinging breath.


    im done, good luck pal!


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    yo



    i devour spirits u talkin bout my "coward" lyrics?/ 1
    i doubt the fear is half as bad when da bouncer here it/

    u just cant amount u queerish direction steering 2 a grave site/ 2
    2 death wit a bat i beat u wasnt really a brave fight/

    talkin bout u rock mics on the real u got stage-fright/ 3
    take a fillet knife into 2 ya face right-when u was muggin/

    niggas yellin atchu "Hoe" like they all jim duggan/ 4
    slit both wrist under ya chin that's throat im cuttin/

    1 more right? ..........



    this is "spades" ima ace ya jack of hearts its over/ 5
    eat the card and spit dart's till u start a coma/



    same 2 u homie
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    nice one m8, uppin votes


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    Yo you both need to vote on other battles.I have three battles up that need Votes.

    Any way this battle was cool and quick im going with Sleep Sinatra

    Vote Sleep Sinatra

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    man u dont ever even battle officially locka so shut the hell up please lol, and u didnt break down ur vote (multi's punches etc.) even if i was for me im not gonna call it a vote ...UPPIN FOR ACTUAL VOTES PLZ

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    thats decent off you man, much respect


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    vocab=Jack
    flow=Sleep
    creativity=Jack
    punches=Sleep
    wordplay=Sleep

    nice battle overall, Sleep gets my vote, but Jack had some pretty nice lines, good shit, peace

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    aye cheers for the vote.....ya twat j/k!! uppin


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    -three multis
    -no punches
    -no personals
    -both verses sucked
    -both of you lost
    -those verses were ten bars not five you virgin fuck twats
    -i win for taking the time to read this


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    the prince beheads the cowardice of malcontents and weaklins
    brisk sword motions bends the neck and pops the head to the ceiling
    ok opener i guess........kind of sounds like a song though, not a battle verse........

    weaving potions that i grope on your membrane and unleash acid
    spilling your fluids into a glass and keeping your head on my wall plasted
    i don't think plasted is a word, i think you were looking for 'plastered', but that sounds dumb too........

    another victim at the end of my decisions, watching him sleep then kill with precision
    filling his dream with the thought of fools, then disecting his imagery with primitive tools
    the first line rhymes with itself but with nothing else, as does the second line..........more imagry, but not one diss to dude yet......

    u may be sleeping but its time to rise- im creeping in your house cutting phone wires
    use the same pliars and unlatch your lock, then spit fire and stain your mind with hock
    again with the one line rhyming with itself but not the other........and what is 'hock'??

    i stop. sweep away the debris and whatever is left
    another death from the depth of a poet's stinging breath.
    weak closer.......

    you had no real punchlines, not one personal towards dude, and you used words that i've never heard of.........it looks like you took a verse from like 2 months ago and applied it here....

    i devour spirits u talkin bout my "coward" lyrics?/ 1
    i doubt the fear is half as bad when da bouncer here it/
    ehh.....not really a good punch or a good opener........i didn't see him say anythign about you're 'coward lyrics' either........

    u just cant amount u queerish direction steering 2 a grave site/ 2
    2 death wit a bat i beat u wasnt really a brave fight/
    filler......

    talkin bout u rock mics on the real u got stage-fright/ 3
    take a fillet knife into 2 ya face right-when u was muggin/
    nothing about 'rocking mics' in his verse.......and 'muggin' rhymes with nothing in this bar.......

    niggas yellin atchu "Hoe" like they all jim duggan/ 4
    slit both wrist under ya chin that's throat im cuttin/
    filler.......the first line is cool i guess, but the second sounds like a half line stretched into a full one........

    this is "spades" ima ace ya jack of hearts its over/ 5
    eat the card and spit dart's till u start a coma/
    the only personal in the whole battle..........weak closer because you said 'start a coma'.........i know you said it to fit the multi, but that just sounds corny.....

    you had more multis than dude did, you had more personals, but you still didn't have any punchlines that came anywhere near hitting.......and the talk about him saying shit he didn't say in his verse makes it look like you just took an old verse and applied it as well.......

    no offense, but i don't think either dude really had a respectable battle verse..........first guy sounded like he took a concept piece about him being an executioner and applied it, the second guy sounded like he took random disses (except for the last line) from other battles and recycled them here.........

    VOTE: sleep sinatra

    but i think both need work..........no 'hate' just my honest opinion.......

    i'd appreciate some votes on my battle too please....

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    Quote Originally Posted by martyr View Post
    -three multis
    -no punches
    -no personals
    -both verses sucked
    -both of you lost
    -those verses were ten bars not five you virgin fuck twats
    -i win for taking the time to read this

    ...fuck off why would u even take the time 2 post sum shit if u aint got nuthin 2 say?

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