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    Default i-ecca's notepad

    8 bars:

    Dim dark shadows sparking in the parks darkness
    One part wants to embark the other part is heartless
    Moody artless surround-sounds pounding my mind
    and leaving it without any kind of grounding in time
    An astounding fine wine are served through veins
    I pass the glass untouched n let my words chew brains
    Like two chains connected to eachother in both ends
    i form a strong unshaped zero so I can coat trends
    Last edited by i_ecca; 11-12-2009 at 04:28 AM. Reason: rules :D

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    Nice, but I don't get it; which ain't necessarily a bad thing.

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    i was thinking the same^^ a bit warcloudy
    Ol' Dirty Bastard swordplay, Dirt McGirt be pickin up skirts on 4th & Broadway, 70's b*tch be suckin ma di*k, Peurto Rican hoes be lickin ma split, California Mountain Snake on debate
    be givin me head while I'm countin my cake, crushin up an 8th
    of that snow white sh*t, in the Pu*sy Wagon - not hittin tha brakes.....

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    hehe thx guys

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    by the way being abit warcloudy wasnt supposed to be a bad thing - just deep - nameeen
    Ol' Dirty Bastard swordplay, Dirt McGirt be pickin up skirts on 4th & Broadway, 70's b*tch be suckin ma di*k, Peurto Rican hoes be lickin ma split, California Mountain Snake on debate
    be givin me head while I'm countin my cake, crushin up an 8th
    of that snow white sh*t, in the Pu*sy Wagon - not hittin tha brakes.....

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    Liked the 1st one better, dark and gloomy !

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    Quote Originally Posted by i_ecca View Post
    8 bars:

    Dim dark shadows sparking in the parks darkness
    One part wants to embark the other part is heartless
    Moody artless surround-sounds pounding my mind
    and leaving it without any kind of grounding in time
    An astounding fine wine are served through veins
    I pass the glass untouched n let my words chew brains
    Like two chains connected to eachother in both ends
    i form a strong unshaped zero so I can coat trends

    8 bars:

    i am a crazy ill minded kid like the one
    asian young hun from the crazy 88's
    u spray the strays as i mace ur face
    this aint ladys nites, u better take the gate
    hit the road cuz u cant compare with my flow
    sharp, it slits ur throat n i spit the dope
    on tracks, whack cats gets bomb'd like iraq
    laid back, i lay back, rest and stay phat

    these 2 8's are not connected to each other ^^ just some rand lines i wrote. second one is kinda battle stylish but dunno. ill post more later.


    OK. the first 8 was good. Nice vocab, etc. Only problem is that you tried to hard to make it deep, which made some of it not make sense.
    The second half is blah. Simple, played out gangster lines. Not being a bitch just giving criticism. It's like..you can't just go from "Wine served through veins" to "bomb like iraq, i be phat blah ba blah". But yes, I liked first one.


    Oh, and hit up my shit. Need some advice. My verses in Temple of Darts I mean.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Prototype View Post
    OK. the first 8 was good. Nice vocab, etc. Only problem is that you tried to hard to make it deep, which made some of it not make sense.
    The second half is blah. Simple, played out gangster lines. Not being a bitch just giving criticism. It's like..you can't just go from "Wine served through veins" to "bomb like iraq, i be phat blah ba blah". But yes, I liked first one.


    Oh, and hit up my shit. Need some advice. My verses in Temple of Darts I mean.
    well thx. first of all, first one makes sense! and yes first 8 are more worked tru then second one. second one was more of an keystyle verse. kinda played out yeah^^if u dont get my verse ask instead of saying "nah doesnt make sense" hehe but thx as i said. ill check ur shit out!

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    the necromancer, words amp like cancer
    murderous, slay all the background dancers
    revive, always murder twice, roam the skies
    hope to die, venus to pluto distance
    laser guided missions, its substance sharp
    incognito darts, client offensive pencil
    under, behind, formed, shaped, a torn face
    left tellus jealous, all it left was a soar maze
    cordless, unconnectable, feelings feelings
    ordered madness, it was swedens meanest
    creepy beings, travel like shadows, unseen
    never glance, surroundings feels seen, unreal

    new one ^^
    Last edited by i_ecca; 04-09-2008 at 01:31 AM.

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    her eyes displayed it all, she was never old
    never told, untold, one call grabbed her soul
    the slopes she fought on made her weary n grey
    i swear to this day, she had it but couldn't stay
    to many hours without daylight, all the fights
    roped her tight to the point her sight went blind
    she tried but not for a long time, it ended fast
    a relentless mass made by men polluted by cash
    minced her pipes, to this day i remember her eyes
    when i watch the stars falling in the sky i can see cindy cry

    new one again ^^ some good beats iam listening to made me write these 2 verses.
    Last edited by i_ecca; 04-09-2008 at 01:01 PM.

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    pt.1 (security codes)

    security codes insecurely handled, i call it false
    hold your horse, a ball rolls with yall next fall
    the wall fell but did it really fall, be not sure
    links, data gathered, smugglers behind the laws
    security codes, security codes inside the building
    a offensive firewall in the dark heart screaming
    the image painted by these thief's i can not handle
    dismantled planet, gold n silver left us rusty panels

    pt.2 (
    outcome, a fatality)

    public security, insecure public, a moshpit
    the desk inside the office, sleeping coffins
    humans, cyborgs cry wars and humans die for
    heads over, heads held a well shut dutch door
    molded mentality floats far from reality
    controlled brain surgery, outcome, a fatality
    casualties, its all over, a stone born clover
    to clever never, a severed age still working

    pt.3 (chaos at the railway junction)

    i travel behind my sky, always marvel
    i see a child playing with rolling marbles
    store the charges, vintage luggage, iam thinking
    sink my teeth in, a sinking ceiling never sleeping
    the creepy parts born from start, a scart cable
    connects my heart, lost its plating around mars
    muted stars constantly appear, the graphic symbol
    out of function, chaos at the railway junction

    pt.4 (
    seconds rapidly sprouting)

    disorder in the upper case, confusion in the lower
    a flame set way back burned the fuses in the storage
    yet the flame contains a spark yelling, fire fire
    from inside the broken dryer, soon it might retire
    a demonic liar hurting itself searching for fuel
    trapped like neon, this demon buried the jewels
    scared of loosing, scared of rules, behind the truth
    dwells a secret fountain, seconds rapidly sprouting

    [writing like a madman atm.]
    [pt.1 & pt.2 sees light]
    [pt.3 takes on a new turn.]
    [pt.4 the end.]
    [title: chaos in a system]



    Last edited by i_ecca; 04-09-2008 at 04:05 PM.

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    i was really feelin the first eight you posted. good imagery.
    weep for lost babylon,
    the bleeding god, the forgotten sheep slaughtered in a forest of evil fog
    bordered by a sea of faults,
    fleeing mobs turn to see the holocaust and become kings and queens of salt
    screaming shots, police and chalk,
    wingless fallen demons walking among us as people...

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    yo u got some deep lyricism you put allot of thought in ur writing and i can appreciate that. you have great imagery and your rhyme style is slightly borrowed from warcloud & abstract ghostface which is something that can be to an advantage if you truely study the style then i think you could be really entertaining.

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    well thx but ive been writing for many years, long before i heard warcloud. thou i cant say he didnt inspired me so ur prolly right
    Last edited by i_ecca; 11-12-2009 at 04:29 AM.

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    long time no see ^^ !

    just wrote a 16 line freestylish thing, here u go.

    the birds in the forest, i_crime like wallace
    stand the tallest, hundred percent immortal
    in mortal combat, not flawless only far beyond
    megaton don, transform graphics like megatron
    global audio opticom, enhanced data telecom
    natures beast from the east, a wooden palm
    strikes hard, nah cuz yall ain't ready yet
    like who the fuck decapitated nessies head
    me ofc! me ofc!
    the optoelectric nuclear force
    all stories told, the wooden horse
    new age matrix soldier trojan war lord
    score like a player but kid i ain't one
    i am a saints son, the bible has its way
    drink up youre chardonnay, the devil delay
    mayflowers withered early at the masquerade

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