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    Default trapped in hell

    i could remember 98 my mind was locked in a cage/
    my heart was rage,bcuz tha devil i embraced/
    the truth was far 4rm me/
    i was blind couldnt see/
    all my dream was locked wiv a key/
    i followed evil/
    but GODs epistle keep ringin in my head lyk a whistle/
    i couldnt focus on tha facts of life/
    bcuz my words were scarlet lyk a swine/
    never figured out tha reason why God saved my life/
    dat nite i might heve died/
    my moms found it hard 2 understand who i was/
    life was ruff/
    livin da trife life i slanged kurupt/
    couldnt trust God/
    a youth kurupt wiv wicked mind/
    swallowed wiv pride/
    all i did in lfe were lyk paragraphs never completed/
    so i seek 4 wisdom/
    4rm da holy scripture/
    Last edited by d22; 05-05-2008 at 01:13 PM.
    "I deal with tha truth and build with the youth"

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    okay it's dope i can read the passion in your lyrics and you have good form (stanzas are short but has potency keep the progression coming

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    Cool verse and welcome to the forum






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    The spelling tripped me up a bit, but i like what you were saying heartfelt.



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