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    Sounds.. Pretty .. Coo 2 Me.. > Just Practice.. Wit Every Thing .. {thats What I Did.. And Still Am} On Freestyle.. On Written.. . N E Thing That Comes 2 Ur Head.. Just Keep It In Mind.. Or .. Scribe.. So.. When.. U Write.. U Can Either Go Wit Something That Is On Ur Mind.. Or. . Something That Got Ur Attention ..

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    good looks
    "i got drug spots from NY to Canada/
    cuz Big L b fuckin wit more keys then a janita/"
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    yo,i love chillin listenin to that old school shit/
    learn somethin new from somethin old, thats how i do shit/
    fuck all this new shit, they dont think they just spit/
    listen to me quik peace to big and all the hip hop legends/
    cuz im bettin they battlin up in heaven/
    i can see em now just sweatin/
    waitin for me to show up they begin stretchin/
    gotta teach this kid a lesson/
    lick my lips to get ready for the words that im wettin/
    comin from the kingdom i giv u a blessin/
    i continue stressin hopin i can make it thru the obstacles i will soon ensue/
    gettin wile spittin it heavy thru and thru/
    im comin for my crown cuz its long overdue/
    u askin who am i, nigga who r u i spit that ill shit like i got a speech impedement/
    fuckin wit my shit will lead to ur detrement/
    my flows kickin like bruce lee so i like to chew peppermint/
    comin against me these mc;s are easy come easy go/
    thinkin they got skills but a flow is easy when its slo/
    here we go....again ima a shoalin monk but i sin/
    i degrade the forest wit my twin/
    pissin on trees so people know where i been/


    heres some more stupid shit i just put together, lemme kno
    "i got drug spots from NY to Canada/
    cuz Big L b fuckin wit more keys then a janita/"
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    havent been on the site in a while but check it

    you kno it shulda been told or even written in the scrolls/
    that no mc culd be released from my lyrical threshold/
    i bless those, who dont got the gift that i possess yo/
    jump on a chics chest and i show her ma breaststoke/
    so lets go, im wit it, you call it impossible wen i done did it/
    u tryin to stop the flo but i continue on wit it/
    u gonna get swung on kid so quit it/
    yo, my rymes are above and beyond fame son so u can just chill/
    poison ya brain wit no vaccine cuz im just so ill/
    its easy to see that im greater cuz im the kid from the hill/
    just like method man my clan never ran never will/
    look, niggas cant stand the shit that i write wit my right hand/
    ayt than, you can neva match ma might man/
    i fight man, my battles are lopsided despite the fact that im white man/
    u tried to step up but fell off the edge of the knife man/
    yea i c u got a vest on ya chest, and/
    kevlar cant stop a 50 to ya brest, dam/
    c in my clic there is no such thing as snitchin/
    cuz at point blank range theres no such thing as missin/
    "i got drug spots from NY to Canada/
    cuz Big L b fuckin wit more keys then a janita/"
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    Yeah Really feelin this last verse of yours man, the flow was there, and your creativity elevated nicely since i first read ya ish, good shit. ill opener man remember da opener is everything, n then again its nothing.

    stay up and keep blessin

    Tables Turn..Which Made it Worse, Engaged N' Searched..
    for a Way ta' Learn, how ta Take tha' Curse of the Weight of Earth
    Incase it Curved, and Strained my Nervous System..
    Rage it Burst, n' Explained in Words how ta Further Wisdom

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    thanx everybody for u replies, believe it or not its little comments like urs that make me wanna keep rytin
    peace
    "i got drug spots from NY to Canada/
    cuz Big L b fuckin wit more keys then a janita/"
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    Quote Originally Posted by adedwutang
    thanx everybody for u replies, believe it or not its little comments like urs that make me wanna keep rytin
    peace
    I concur it also helps when constructive criticism is made...PeacecaeP

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    just somethin i got on my profile for aol
    check it



    The Lift
    i woke up to a phone at 5 after 8/
    my mouth was filled with a bitter sweet taste/
    it was ma man callin up sayin meet me at the place/
    so i went to the bathroom and washed the sleep out ma face/
    he said i aint got much time and i gotta quikken up ma pace/
    so my slo motion movement turned to a race/
    grabbed the jewelry out ma case/
    then said by to ma baby cuz i knew i plucked an ace/
    waitin for my ride on the corner of the street/
    ma walkman playin and my head bobbin to the beat/
    thinkin to myself how i didnt get enuff sleep/
    then i felt a vibration at the bottom of ma feet/
    a car approached the curb and it was ma boy in the jeep/
    we drove away calm and collective, lookin all sleek/
    he drove real slo so i dozed off in the car/
    he said wake ya ass up cuz we not that far/
    we got to the place and i realized it was a bar/
    we went inside and took the lift to the loft/
    a man opened the door i said can we speak to the boss/
    he said "listen kid u better get lost"/
    my ass, i kno every man has his cost/
    slipped him a twenty and he said the niggas in the back/
    walkin thru the room and saw everyone was wearin black/
    aint hard to tell that they was sellin crack/
    the rocks was big and the pockets wasnt flat/
    herd a deep voice in the shadows that instructed wut our mission was/
    wasnt listenin to wut he said except "u gonna need some slugs"/
    later found out we had to prove our worthiness in the set/
    veterans was arguin as they were settin up a bet/
    "betcha the white boy backs out" forget that man i gotta rep/
    this is my life man i cant live off of checks/
    my boy told me we had to merc some kid/
    they didnt even let us kno what this little nigga did/
    i thought to myself this is some fucked up shit/
    wut could of this little boy done to get this bid/
    gotta do wut i gotta do, never mind wats rite/
    creeped up to his buildin in the middle of the nite/
    saw him chillin on the corner so we stayed out of site/
    i hesitated as my man started out into the light/
    confronted him real nice, n he said wutup u wanna fight/
    had my ghat in hand and i was holdin it tight/
    i made a movement real slight, and this dude pulls a 40 from the right/
    we open fire at eachother and he hits my man in the chest/
    i emptied my clip and put my hand to rest/
    then i was shocked by wut had happened next/
    a cop comes around the corner so i run till im out of breath/
    a quik cut to the side alley and into a random door/
    i sat and waited smellin the piss on the floor/
    my finger was feelin real sore, as i waited some more/
    walked out prayin to god that i would b ignored/
    next mornin paper says that 2 kids were found dead/
    i had so many thoughts rushin to my head/
    couldnt sleep all nite sittin in my bed/
    woke up and looked for the paper that i had read/
    nowhere to be found and i hear the phone ring once then again/
    my man says where u been man how much u overslept/
    i realized it was all a dream and i felt blessed/
    im gettin out of this business man i never shuld of messed/

    this isnt exactly how it went but i made it a little little different so i can ryme, and its more like a poem with no beat to it so u gotta add some flow to it when u read to make it sound rite
    get at me
    "i got drug spots from NY to Canada/
    cuz Big L b fuckin wit more keys then a janita/"
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    you see i try to monaplize so im my friend and my enemy/
    see in my eyes and im takin over the whole world steadily/
    if im not the best pound for pound soon then i better b/
    my flows like a plasma field, calm but deadly/
    sometimes known to strike lightning so be ready b/
    i dont think i even time to whoop everybodys ass hmm lemme c/
    now its easy to spit words that just sound good together/
    but when it makes sense you kno it sounds even better/
    my verses are more like poems or even a simple letter/
    sometimes i got shit that involves nines and berettas/
    but i try to stay away from topics talkin bout makin cheddah/
    shit syracuse beat uconn this is lookin like a great day so far/
    pumped to play ball but i got no car/
    walk to the court listenin to esco( )bar/
    nas always a birdie dont settle for par/
    inspiration to rhyme as i walk these streets/
    listenin to only the old school beats/
    sun shinin in my eye and this nigga lookin like he got beef/
    wutchu want dooney ill bust ya in ya teeth/
    dam check this shorty ass like a jeep/
    seen her face and she look like she take it real deep/
    shit bout now im feenin ta go ta sleep/
    all this walkig bringin pain to ma feet/
    nd tmoros friday so i cant eat meat/
    w/e im about ta tear these dudes up/
    if i hustle em write i ca get a buck/

    not my best but i thought i wuld post it n e wayz
    wrote it today as i was walkin down the street as you can tell i was rymin bout things i was thinkin about at the moment
    get at me
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    "i got drug spots from NY to Canada/
    cuz Big L b fuckin wit more keys then a janita/"
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    ne body care to criticize my last 2 posts or shuld i just stop posting since it seems not to many people care
    "i got drug spots from NY to Canada/
    cuz Big L b fuckin wit more keys then a janita/"
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    homey i bag hoes like crooks bag clothes/
    my hooks bleed flows/
    my books i read closed/
    people like to look cuz they knoes/
    dont nobody smokes mo droes/
    gimme those/
    gimme that/
    gimme blunts and gimme ghats/
    startin to look like a party pack/
    fuck u man giv it back/
    u thought i was 2 yung and culdnt rap/
    well i think u thought wrong so keep thinking jack/
    gettin tired of rhymin gotta stop smokin spliffs
    put some words together call it a verse then call it quits/
    i dont need this shit so i mite as well ditch/
    no one wants to hear a kid rap so i mite as well....(shit)/
    "i got drug spots from NY to Canada/
    cuz Big L b fuckin wit more keys then a janita/"
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    thanx but i already got some one workin on my shit, besides im not plannin on becomin a rapstar cuz i hate mainstream music, but ill take it as a compliment

    leave me 1 peace
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    cuz Big L b fuckin wit more keys then a janita/"
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    check it, cars a are driven to thrill/
    criminals are driven to kill/
    ima top class rapper so im driven by will/
    cuz im drippin wit skill/
    i stay sick and stay ill/
    u half of ma stature and im the whole fill/
    down south they flashin gold in they grills/
    up here we smack the diamond out ya mouth wit them bills/
    we dont get flashy we just chill/
    stay lo pro until the first mil/
    i forever stay spittin shit that b real/
    u stay talkin bout people lives that u steal/
    i did this and i did that/
    giv us some more details wy u holdin back/
    cuz u dont got the info to back it up u just crack/
    keep talkin bout all the people that u clapped/
    what goes around comes around, dont matter if u strapped/

    its simple but im not really gettin to serious about writin ne more. lemme kno
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    "i got drug spots from NY to Canada/
    cuz Big L b fuckin wit more keys then a janita/"
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    Listen, you can neva masta this kids statcha/
    i blastcha, blow pastcha/
    poison you wit every rhyme that u captcha/
    watcha organs ruptcha/
    you just hip to the hop, homey i out raptcha/
    riptcha, body to the limit, put it to the test uh/
    now lemme bless ya, wit ma lryical lectcha/
    you cant touch my imperical textcha/
    dont let me wetcha cuz i gotcha wen i getcha/
    homey watch ya step uh/
    gonna get wrecked yup/
    homey got a tec wut/
    puttin holes in ya chest/
    yea, runnin outa breathe/
    check it, i take 1 45. thats ten shots to ya body/
    now you and ya hottie cant take the shots from the shotti/
    watch me/
    my lyrical flava you can neva test it/
    cuz god has blessed it/
    thats ma case son i rest it/
    check it/
    niggas wanna step but they aint got the heart/
    cuz i split apart ya brain from the very very start/
    and i am soo... very very smart/
    rip ya bones from ya flesh yes every single part/
    only 5'11 but im a wordplay giant/
    take ya everyday common rules then i defy it/
    you wanna fuck wit me homey yea u can try it/
    thinkin that u betta then me, nah i dont buy it/

    get at me
    "i got drug spots from NY to Canada/
    cuz Big L b fuckin wit more keys then a janita/"
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