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    since day one, ive always stayed ahead of the game
    never play son, my style defined by my pen n my name
    i stay on the grind, as unfinished dreams play on my mind
    im waitin to shine, but fame n fortune takin they time
    my ordeal, it's all real, theres nothin fake in my rhymes
    let my rhymes shine, yall aint on par wit my lyrics
    clever like einstein, hip hop left a scar on my spirit
    flavour like fine wine, im stayin far from the gimmiks
    its a dirty game, everyone screamin keep ya records real
    but if you aint a gangsta, its hard to keep ya record deal
    they only lookin for one thing, that cookin up drugs thing
    sup wit that? fuck the crack im readin books in the dungeon
    they aint lookin for the raw deal, they juss ignore skills
    dollar signs in they eyes, always huntin for more mills
    dont get me wrong, aint a bad thing tryin to make money
    but makin those bills wit a rapper wit no skills aint funny
    its kinda fake to me,
    you juss cant get signed, if you write lyrics that wouldnt sell in the clubs
    but sum1 who cant write rhymes gets a deal cause he was sellin some drugs


    juss a quick free

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    thanx for the feedback n advice homie

    coo beans

    ima work on that vocab

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    Simple rhyme, but pretty decent. Subject matter is kinda lacking. If it's just something you typed up quickly though, it's pretty nice.


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    thanx homie

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    Quote Originally Posted by SpOk3N
    its good, but the subject matter, and rhyme schemes are too basic. Try to use bigger vocab, and have a good topic to write on. Like, a concept or something. peace out, 1
    no homo there buddy 8)

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    Verse Was Hot I Feel The Subject Thats How The Game Here In Detroit Is Ireally Understand What U Saying Homey Keep It Up
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