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    making niggas bow down when they step to me
    have u feeling like u had a hysterectimy
    im quick on my feet man
    when it comes to rapping
    making niggas bounce back and start the clapping
    have u feeling like a ceaser up on stage
    stop trying to hind behind the shade
    u ain't jonny cage
    u getting straight up playd
    u better step correctly if u feel like a man
    have u getting scared bout to get slapped with the back hand
    getting shook when i spit
    when i spit the first bar
    i'll have u feeling sick
    i plan to get a record deal before go
    that is something u got to know
    all u gotta do is listen to one line
    i got ya girl number cuz im on the ground
    breaking niggas heart from time to time
    i put u down and make u feel unconceeded
    just do like michael jackson said and just beat it
    u another dude standing in my way of fame
    and if u hating on me then u hating on my game

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    I suppose it's not too bad for a 13 year old. You really need to implement some less standard rhyme schemes though, try and use a bit more vocab, and you definately need to work on your content and subject matter. I'm guessing you're new to writing. I'm sure you can improve over time if you keep at it.

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    I suppose you were busting.

    PS: Keep posting

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