once upon a time in shaolin - buy the book now!
Results 1 to 3 of 3

Thread: startoff

  1. #1

    Default startoff

    making niggas bow down when they step to me
    have u feeling like u had a hysterectimy
    im quick on my feet man
    when it comes to rapping
    making niggas bounce back and start the clapping
    have u feeling like a ceaser up on stage
    stop trying to hind behind the shade
    u ain't jonny cage
    u getting straight up playd
    u better step correctly if u feel like a man
    have u getting scared bout to get slapped with the back hand
    getting shook when i spit
    when i spit the first bar
    i'll have u feeling sick
    i plan to get a record deal before go
    that is something u got to know
    all u gotta do is listen to one line
    i got ya girl number cuz im on the ground
    breaking niggas heart from time to time
    i put u down and make u feel unconceeded
    just do like michael jackson said and just beat it
    u another dude standing in my way of fame
    and if u hating on me then u hating on my game

  2. #2
    The ABBOTT noel411's Avatar
    Join Date
    Jun 2003
    Location
    Australia
    Age
    35
    Posts
    5,566
    Rep Power
    54

    Default Re: startoff

    I suppose it's not too bad for a 13 year old. You really need to implement some less standard rhyme schemes though, try and use a bit more vocab, and you definately need to work on your content and subject matter. I'm guessing you're new to writing. I'm sure you can improve over time if you keep at it.


    THE LORD noel411 HAS A NEW ALBUM OUT!!! Czech it out here...

    http://www.wutang-corp.com/forum/sho...80#post2575080

    Suck this drunk alcohol dick.

  3. #3
    Taoist Saint GuardianOne's Avatar
    Join Date
    Jun 2005
    Location
    Zambia
    Age
    36
    Posts
    1,257
    Rep Power
    15

    Default Re: startoff

    I suppose you were busting.

    Peace
    PS: Keep posting

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •