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    god speaks to me through sign language
    but i'm not good with my hands
    i'm good with me tongue
    so i can't understand shit
    i haven't lived life
    i've delt with it
    my soul is felt-tipped
    written on hallways
    where nobody stands, they sit
    it shows my soul gets shitted on
    that's just reality
    i can only blame one man
    for the problems i face in life
    he's been there since the day i was born
    to my first steps
    til i witness my last breathes
    he's the reason i've said goodbye
    to some of my best friends
    and give hugs to my worst enemies
    suckin' on deaths venom
    is all i seem to enjoy
    cause ever since i was a boy
    ignored by christ's blessings
    his presense in my life
    wasn't much more than an annoyance
    i'm staring at his picture in the laundry room
    questioning existence of a higher being
    and still can't recieve an answer
    but if you look at the disasters we face
    it's either the end of the world
    in revelations
    or we're followers with no master
    the clock just seems to tick faster
    i lost the race
    martin luther tried to uplift blacks
    he lost his race
    convicted rapists that are set up for trial
    they dodge the case
    i need to make some money rappin'
    shystar's on a paper chase
    and i'll use half to feed the children
    i won't rub it in you face
    i'll get the fuck up outta dodge
    i swear i won't leave a trace
    to all my people, everywhere
    who feel like they have no place..in life
    you're not alone
    but we can make things right
    despite my past efforts
    i'm destined to make a record
    that will touch so many hearts
    racist white folks just might even respect it
    i lift the sleeves of my sweatshirt
    and stick my hands in the dirt
    'cause i'm trying to touch this planet
    and damn it, i hope this works
    FCK A SHOUT OUT!

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    Default Re: Touch The World

    damn whats it take to get feedback on some ltrics...my shit can't be that fucking bad. i know my shit isn't "scientific" and confusing but still... not everyone here needs to rap like rza
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    Default Re: Touch The World

    nobody has shit to say...that's ridiculous
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    Default Re: Touch The World

    i've seen worse rhymes with positive responses, can someone atleast tell me what i can touch up to make it better.
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    Default Re: Touch The World

    i read sum of it just now so far....it seems a little to sentimental for me right now...it's ill but just make it sound a little more ruff around the edges nah mean...i'll get back to you when i got time to read the whole thing.....peace

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    Default Re: Touch The World

    Thats whats good, you got dreams mang, good luck on everything.

    The rhyme scheme could use work though, I'm not sure how that would fit on a beat.

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    Default Re: Touch The World

    i wrote it to the beat off mf dooms special herbs 9+0 called coltsfoot leaf. i believe it's the 7th track on the album.
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