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    Default "Eye Cry(where I've been)" gimme some feed back

    I've lived through the struggle,
    My whole life is a hustle,
    Trapped in a bubble,
    Locked in the wickidness of trouble,
    With bloody knuckles,
    Standing high, movin fly,
    I always overshine,
    Competetion can't bury mine,
    The mighty dollar sign,
    Corrupting my mind,
    Hyponotized, By the Snake's Eyes,
    With my head in the skies,
    I can hear the angels cry,
    Life just wouldn't grasp me,
    My grandfather only one to understand me,
    And damn I miss you,
    When you left a part of me died with you,
    Now I'm so estranged,
    Novacain, couldn't soothe the pain,
    Only I can't stop the rain,
    My hands wearing bloodstains,
    My whole life is a ghetto,
    I can hear the shots echo,
    Out here that's how shit gets setteled,
    Gangstas pop the metal,
    Stuck in this world waitin for it to end,
    Again, I find my pen and pad my only two friends,

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    Default Re: "Eye Cry(where I've been)" gimme some feed back

    i like your style some heavy shit yo check out my Wu slang and tell me what u think peace Snake Eyes

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    Default Re: "Eye Cry(where I've been)" gimme some feed back

    it had a flow to it

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    Default Re: "Eye Cry(where I've been)" gimme some feed back

    SPACE YOUR RHYMES OUT!!!!!! i had to say it......thats not really rappin...true MCs can make a whole song and just 'make' it sound like it rhymes....unless u tryin to be a lyricist then u have a long way to go my friend

    BUT i do LIKE ALOT how u were expressing yourself...dont ever quit on that.....keep going and driving yourself..but i dont wanna sound like im preaching....so good luck man..hope to see you improve on here

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