hey im new to this forum and i write some rhymes. lemme know what you guys think or things i can improve on. any criticism welcome.
You might steal rhymes from other people but my schemes are unreadable/genuinely deceivable but not far from believable.
How much money does the average rapper make, I donít care most of em are so fucking fake. Tryna justify what they speak with weak ass flows/ cant measure up might as well just touch their toes. My verses are seamless like ancient ruins buried beneath us/ Like roaches in the basement unseen for weeks, starting to feel the heat I elevate off the concrete, sun shining beating, heart pounding, believe me, x-ray goggles but my visions hazy, cant see the future but still a little crazy, Beverly hills, prescription pills look at me again u gonna have a medical bill/ No joke, my flows almost on empty and im on broke. Donít try to discover my essence ill rip out every one of your fucking teeth and make a necklace, better start countin your blessings and, whenever I get bored ill just start going hectic, so respect it. I go out to eat and just dine and dash, and if I had a gun it probably go click clack, stay with me donít slip passed my quick syllables that roll off my tongue, feet sprung like grass run fast through the alley I sleep in, leave me some food or ill break into your kitchen on the weekend/ blood circulates but thereís no response, lines dead just static, find the respirator in the attic, dusty boxes but no luck might as well just call a toe truck, toe tag get the green bag, not lying this time its real, need a paramedic but my lips are sealed.
float to the sun, my words just begun/ fill the air which i declare my space resurrect the truth, every last place/ no lifeline to be traced fate has taken over and i'm first place