0
 

home
news
wu-tang clan
bio's
media
store
blogs
forum
contact

Go Back   Wu-Tang Corp. - Official Site of the Wu-Tang Clan > The Lab > Temple Of Darts

Reply
 
Thread Tools Display Modes
Old 02-01-2007, 01:09 PM   #1
BoAr
Junior Member
 
Join Date: Apr 2006
Posts: 42
Rep Power: 0
BoAr grasshopper
Default Blah

..Harpoons Enter Your ‘Esophagus’ Resulting In ‘Demise’ Survival Not Likely ‘Miraculous’..
..With The ‘Oddest-Twists’ Infected Fists Violently Wind Down Throats Like ‘Osmosis-Tempests’..
.. Will Banish This Chat Room Praising Adolescent With Crescent Shaped Screws....
..That'll Pierce Through His Prescence..The Rank's Likely Not Growing Like Zombie Pubes..
.. Body Spews Insides It's The End Your Complexsion Turns Green Colored Like Skittle-Blends..
..Cranium Bent So I Gorge Your Neck Till Nothings Left But Scents..Like Scarface Your Too Little-Friend..
..Tormentful Torrents Smashing Flesh Against Rocks..Grinding Until Your Dust-Like-Sand..
.. A Blood Lust Fan Seperating Skin From Bones So You Lose Weight Like Workout-Plans..
..A Rook Thirsty Vet, Impaling You Till Shook Hurtfully-Threats...
..Igniting Your Figure Next..Having Your Head Rest Alone In My Home Like Jersey-Nets...
BoAr is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 02-01-2007, 03:05 PM   #2
Bigot Hitman
"Come as you are"
 
Bigot Hitman's Avatar
 
Join Date: May 2006
Location: Cincinnati, walnut hills
Age: 24
Posts: 2,165
Rep Power: 12
Bigot Hitman shaolin monk
Send a message via AIM to Bigot Hitman
Default

The lines are stretched out too much, unless u rapped like twista, they would be impossible to rap over a beat. You got a great use of vocab in this, simple metaphors, punchlines softcore. 6.8/10 seen better from u
__________________
The dealer of hope is selling me lies
Reasons to live are reasons to die, in disguise
This life was never mine, the rivers never ran
Cross your arms, its too late for helping hands
Spit your pity elsewhere, there's no sympathy needed
For one who's never alive, for one who's never completed (Bigot Hitman)
http://www.wutang-corp.com/forum/sho...=25482&page=61
Bigot Hitman is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 02-01-2007, 05:38 PM   #3
BoAr
Junior Member
 
Join Date: Apr 2006
Posts: 42
Rep Power: 0
BoAr grasshopper
Default

YEa but I like posted iti n a chat room cyper so..
BoAr is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 02-01-2007, 05:51 PM   #4
Bigot Hitman
"Come as you are"
 
Bigot Hitman's Avatar
 
Join Date: May 2006
Location: Cincinnati, walnut hills
Age: 24
Posts: 2,165
Rep Power: 12
Bigot Hitman shaolin monk
Send a message via AIM to Bigot Hitman
Default

if so, then this the type of shit u throw under the raw art thread or your own personal thread of all ur raps, if its just a quick verse it doens't need this whole thread, even if u want feedback on it
__________________
The dealer of hope is selling me lies
Reasons to live are reasons to die, in disguise
This life was never mine, the rivers never ran
Cross your arms, its too late for helping hands
Spit your pity elsewhere, there's no sympathy needed
For one who's never alive, for one who's never completed (Bigot Hitman)
http://www.wutang-corp.com/forum/sho...=25482&page=61
Bigot Hitman is offline   Reply With Quote
Reply

Thread Tools
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off

Forum Jump


All times are GMT -5. The time now is 11:00 AM.


Copyright ©2000 - 2013 The Wu-Tang Corp. & shift-one