Here is an okay rhyme. - Wu-Tang Corp. - Official Site of the Wu-Tang Clan

C'Dub! · 02-09-2007, 11:24 PM

When I throw my shit down
All others wanna frown/
My rhymes is like a loaded gun
So when a punk steps I have my fun/
When I'm done they are blown away
You can see it on they faces as plain as day/
I'm on the stage bein' admired
Meanwhile your rhymes are tired
The crowd decides like Donald Trump "Yo' Fired"/
After a time of silence
People resort to violence/
Tryin' to take me out
I know I'll survive with out a doubt/
Bitches so quick to grab they nines
This is the time when my blade mastery shines/
You wanna waste bullets like candy
to me that's fine and Dandy/
Barge in my door, shoutin' and more
I gotta throw my whore on the floor/
In the shadow, I have my blade
You don't know yet, but you is already made/
Close enough to smell your cologne
Me, as deadly as a corleone/
I slit your throught from ear to ear
Now sets in your true fear
That you'll lose everything that you hold dear/
~C'Dub!

Please post advice and comments.

MOUSER WORDS · 02-10-2007, 12:32 AM

Its Pretty Good. But That Last Part.. The 3rd To Last.. I Just Need That One Word.. Then I Could Tell .. U ..

U Stay..in Upland.. ? Crazy.. Im Originally From L.a .. {bell Gardens.. } But The Past 10 Years On And Off {since The First Time } I Have Been Living. In Bloomington.. {7 Since The Last Time I Moved Back } Right Now .. Im In L.a. Though.. 4 School.. Im In Whittier.. Right Now.. But I Represent.. Bell Gardens.. Not Bloomington.. {bloomington.. Is Alright Though.. } But As An M C No.. Unless Im Sly Boogie.. Its Pretty Cool Though.. Like People Near. With The Same .. Love 4 Hip Hop.. Sick

U Got Something There.. Its Just How U C It.. All That Counts.

C'Dub! · 02-10-2007, 03:45 AM

Nobody knows my covered genious style that flows
Unknown but once it starts up it glows/
Some doubt these abilities of mine
They dull my shine/
You can drink my rhymes lke fine wine
I use my knowledge to keep others in line/
If they don't they feel the sword strike of my rhyme
By the time I'm done they ain't worth a dime/
It's like I sewed up their lip
Cuz' when I unleash my genious I make average people flip/
Walkin' through this land with a different perspective
To see this you don't need a detective/
Goin' through enemies like the sword of a shogun
No need to school novice punks as a form of fun/
I walk around with my identity behind cloak and veil
Make opponent's rhymes as slow as the mail/
Cuttin' down enimies rhymes til' they obtuse
Afterwards you'll find me chuckin' the deuce/
~C'Dub!
This one is my best.

02-09-2007, 11:24 PM	#1
C'Dub! Chill Member Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Upland, Cali. Age: 22 Posts: 61 Rep Power: 0	Here is an okay rhyme. When I throw my shit down All others wanna frown/ My rhymes is like a loaded gun So when a punk steps I have my fun/ When I'm done they are blown away You can see it on they faces as plain as day/ I'm on the stage bein' admired Meanwhile your rhymes are tired The crowd decides like Donald Trump "Yo' Fired"/ After a time of silence People resort to violence/ Tryin' to take me out I know I'll survive with out a doubt/ Bitches so quick to grab they nines This is the time when my blade mastery shines/ You wanna waste bullets like candy to me that's fine and Dandy/ Barge in my door, shoutin' and more I gotta throw my whore on the floor/ In the shadow, I have my blade You don't know yet, but you is already made/ Close enough to smell your cologne Me, as deadly as a corleone/ I slit your throught from ear to ear Now sets in your true fear That you'll lose everything that you hold dear/ ~C'Dub! Please post advice and comments. __________________ I'm a straight up gamer But with a mic I am also a tamer/ Cuz' enemies be like wild beasts never tamed But when i finish they're the ones that get maimed/

02-10-2007, 12:32 AM	#2
MOUSER WORDS Love Poet .. M c of Love Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: LOS ANGELES , CA / TIJUANA , MEXICO Age: 28 Posts: 1,704 Rep Power: 11	Its Pretty Good. But That Last Part.. The 3rd To Last.. I Just Need That One Word.. Then I Could Tell .. U .. U Stay..in Upland.. ? Crazy.. Im Originally From L.a .. {bell Gardens.. } But The Past 10 Years On And Off {since The First Time } I Have Been Living. In Bloomington.. {7 Since The Last Time I Moved Back } Right Now .. Im In L.a. Though.. 4 School.. Im In Whittier.. Right Now.. But I Represent.. Bell Gardens.. Not Bloomington.. {bloomington.. Is Alright Though.. } But As An M C No.. Unless Im Sly Boogie.. Its Pretty Cool Though.. Like People Near. With The Same .. Love 4 Hip Hop.. Sick U Got Something There.. Its Just How U C It.. All That Counts. __________________ you re blown

02-10-2007, 03:45 AM	#3
C'Dub! Chill Member Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Upland, Cali. Age: 22 Posts: 61 Rep Power: 0	Here is another. Nobody knows my covered genious style that flows Unknown but once it starts up it glows/ Some doubt these abilities of mine They dull my shine/ You can drink my rhymes lke fine wine I use my knowledge to keep others in line/ If they don't they feel the sword strike of my rhyme By the time I'm done they ain't worth a dime/ It's like I sewed up their lip Cuz' when I unleash my genious I make average people flip/ Walkin' through this land with a different perspective To see this you don't need a detective/ Goin' through enemies like the sword of a shogun No need to school novice punks as a form of fun/ I walk around with my identity behind cloak and veil Make opponent's rhymes as slow as the mail/ Cuttin' down enimies rhymes til' they obtuse Afterwards you'll find me chuckin' the deuce/ ~C'Dub! This one is my best. __________________ I'm a straight up gamer But with a mic I am also a tamer/ Cuz' enemies be like wild beasts never tamed But when i finish they're the ones that get maimed/

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