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LyRiCaL sHiNoBi
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Trials and tribulations got me hopen for new inovations/
Revolations become a #1 because of soul elimination/ Hopen for a better life, rappen about the same subject every night/ Gotta fight to survive, liven in the darkness with no light/ ~SKKKKKKKKKKKEEEEEEERRRR~ NOW THE REAL SHIT... The grains of sand observe the pains of a man with indifference/ When freefalling re-calling shameless plans of increments/ An instant is defined by a second thats combined with a lesson/ Time is perspective a seductive ocean, condutive lotion/ Tastless, invites you to waste it, but sum obstruct the motion/ An instrutive potion of enlightenment, thats heightened when/ Innocence Nixes ignorance inside divine and righteous men/ The past effects the mind, through deja vu, it's passed a second time/ I have to press rewind, far away enough the track makes a U turn/ but few learn from the relationship the past drapes the future/ Flooded with cynical thoughts i release the first notion/ and freeze the time by suspending the earths motion/ A surge potent enough to tear the surfaces texture in a sense/ Like weight is measured in pounds, time is mesured in events/ Text words can't impress, so i'll help you invison this incertinty/ A old timer has a short life, while a teen lives an eternity/ it opens the next chapter and captures the bland design/ that we can live long and leave our footprints on the sands of time/ Draw it, it'll boost progression, and it will erase the proceedings/ It's time to throw away my clocks and put faith back into my feelings/ wat ya'll think? |
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JOKER FAM
Join Date: Dec 2004
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its really good, i have a hard time concentrating...so i read half, its a dope drop, keep tearing shit up,.1
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Fuckin' Left
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but, erm, i didnt undersand your point or your plot if that was suppose to be some type on story........ |
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lmao @ 7th..
This is a pretty good piece man, nice vocab and internals. This shit could be real tight if the flow was smoothed out just a bit... good work tho..peace |
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Taoist Saint
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It was a tight verse, got a different style not yet in this temple. Nice verse keep posting.
Peace |
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LyRiCaL sHiNoBi
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tight, as you can tell i've switched up everything and got my own shit going on. I hope to see sum of u that i use see back in da day. thxs for all the feed
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