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Old 05-28-2006, 08:17 AM   #1
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I抦 gonna snap like mad max, working with there bad backs//
Nothing happens to them until they turn to nerve wrecks//
Dreaming of a life with light//
Shining brighter then stars shine//
A life without depression, the lesson was the real question//
Homies resting after a gunfight with the smith and western//
Everybody is telling me keep on being real//
But I feel that these scars just won抰 ever heal//
But I keep on moving, trying to live my life like a movie//
All my homies told me that I couldn抰 do it, I just knew it//
You had your last shot sucker you just blew it//
if you find that path my friend you better use it//
I see my homies dyin, hear there mothers cryin//
The bullets will be flyin thru the streets where I抣l be lying//
Any day now, what am I supposed to say now?//
That its all okay now// man this place is a playground//
For murderers, maniacs, pimps and drug dillers//
Kidnapping rapists, and psycho fuckin killas//
I抣l be walkin down these streets every mothafuckin night//
Just prayin that my life someday will be all right//
And it should, cuz I heard Mr: Bush holding a speech//
In witch he kept mentioning justice and peace//
While the police was assaulting my homeboys out in tha streets//
And if that抯 what he calls justice then wont somebody pleas//
Give that man a dictionary and ask him to fuckin read//
Everybody抯 asking about me and my players//
Sprayers, mad dogs working as soldiers for the god payers//
Get up every morning without any reason//
Just hoping that there lives will be better the next season//
But deep inside there hearts, they already know//
That isn抰 the way that it抯 all gonna go//
Cuz when you grow up in the streets, and you live a thug life//
There aint no such things as happiness and sunshine//.

please comment.

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Old 05-28-2006, 08:36 AM   #2
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Old 05-28-2006, 09:54 AM   #3
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Old 05-28-2006, 10:45 AM   #4
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Old 05-29-2006, 03:34 PM   #5
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im walking thru the shadows of my past//
gotta think fast, hard to live lika an outcast//
my heart is pounding so hard that it hurts//
my hands are shakin and i feel like my head is about to burst//
empty shells of lost souls like an echo of silence//
streets filled with corpses and cops that use violence//
my brain is racin and I磎 soced in sweth//
my world is fadeing now I磎 close to death//
i close my eyes as i drag my last breath//
but i wont give up untill my soule gets blessed.

just a little something to keep it goin..
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Old 05-29-2006, 03:41 PM   #6
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ight lookin str8 keep going
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Old 05-29-2006, 03:51 PM   #7
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my songs can make you shake like a fuckin earthquake//
make crates for gods sake, with lyrics that massacrate//
feels great to see you shake, whats up now beefcake?//
i play it straight, with precission on a mission to terminate//
suckas whos runnin late, life is tha heavens gate//
with my debate, of tha rate, about to eliminate//
all tha fakes, its my state, smashin your face againt tha hot plate//

kinnda bad thou.. just fellt like whriting something.

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Old 05-29-2006, 03:52 PM   #8
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thnx white, your opinions are allways highly respected in my book.
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Old 05-29-2006, 06:42 PM   #9
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pretty ill man, the first couples lines were kind of choppy and some didnt rhyme too well, but once you got going it got real nice. You had a nice picture going on and a real message, not just some bullshit. Stay up and keep dropping man.
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Old 05-30-2006, 09:44 AM   #10
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thnx for the comment Project, I磍 work on it.. peace
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Old 05-30-2006, 03:17 PM   #11
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this is a little peice I磎 workin on, i would appreciate if you could give me some comments..

so your the man now riding in your rolls royce?//
just one question where the fuck are your homeboys?//
yeah you got it all, the bling-bling and the wide-screen//
a bigger house then you ever could have dreamed//
more cars then a player ever seen//
top model girlfriend, but you cant be happy//
front cover, of new york times//
showing of your girlfriend, your rings, and your dimes//
a million doller car, million doller house//
I rather live on the street than be a sell-out//
someday you磍l wake up, wonder where your homeboys at//
you lost them on your way to fame and they aint comin back//
they left you for your phoney ass rap//
your million doller cars and your sell-out crap//
but you aint shit, when the music stops//
cuz then your money will be the only friends you got.

pleas comment.. peace
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Old 05-30-2006, 03:24 PM   #12
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i feel what u sayin....wasnt lyrically destructive but i dont think it was suppose 2 be...its good cuz its showin how u think keep it up



as for the other stuff....
great structure.....nice flo....vocab's pretty good (could improve in some areas tho) but ur rhymes are tight


"empty shells of lost souls like an echo of silence//
streets filled with corpses and cops that use violence//"
nice line
overall i'd giv it 8/10
keep it up peace
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Old 05-30-2006, 03:40 PM   #13
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thnx Sirk, I appreciate your comments.. and thnx for the critics, I磍l work on it aight.. and thnx for reading it all thru instead of just one or two lines, really appreciate it yo. and I磍l definitely chek your thread.

peace

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Old 05-30-2006, 08:32 PM   #14
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yo Merrick keep doin' whay you do, you're spittin' realness, which I think is the most important factor when rhymin', but I got to say that last verse you wrote, I was feelin' it but I'd rather have the million dollar crib kid, of course with all my fams and homies along with it, but Big L said it best " 'cause when you got ends you don't need no mothafuckin' friends", lol, just fuckin' with you, do you homie, peace!
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Old 05-31-2006, 07:30 AM   #15
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thnx Don, i appreciate you takin time to read it all, and thnx for the comment, peace
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