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hollywoodrealty · 02-08-2007, 06:54 AM

sacrifice the sacrificial sacraments
like a wall street killing spree, shreading up documents
dig under the pavement to find our ancestors strapped in transenders
like aliens, same gender, nobody's got the answers
coffin's are time machines, they beam into galaxy's
A higher being gave them amnesty for their travesty
its a lost paradox considered unorthodox
where u can freeze time and stop the clocks tic toc
a parrellel universe where everythings been rehearsed
they do what we do but they do it in reverse
age backwards, born at 80, die a baby, considered a hero
wombs are frozen in at tempatures below sub zero
whatever is our destiny, there's no cancelling, u cant void it
there's no escaping your fate, u cant avoid it
who destroyed the 1st earth and killed the dinasaurs
im battling and examining, damn my eyes are sore

Bigot Hitman · 02-08-2007, 03:59 PM

Good creativity, short verses like these are good cuz your more likely to stay on topic. Nice imgination and new concepts on that, and the flow was never uneven throughout. No metaphors or similes, which is ok for this type of short piece. No multies cept for the closer, which is cool but i would of mixed a couple in their to make it sound smoother. 8/10

hollywoodrealty · 02-10-2007, 06:41 AM

yo thanks for the comments, ya i was trying to stay on focus with the subject, i was high and up late writing this shit, thanks for the comments, peace

White N Dangerous · 02-10-2007, 06:49 AM

woo da butcher is back !!!! sup man! diggin this!
feelin da begging alot! really captivates ya read into staying entertained and wanting to acutally read it. rather then the reader feelling like he is forceing himself to read it. very nice potrayed. stay up keep blessin

noel411 · 02-10-2007, 10:57 PM

Not bad. A few interesting concepts in there. It read smoothly. Maybe a subject that could have used a little more depth and detail, but not bad for a quick drop.

hollywoodrealty · 02-11-2007, 05:11 PM

yo white and dangerous, thanks for stoppen by and showing love, ya i never really went anywhere, i have just been working on audio lately, i didnt want to let all thsoe rhymes i wrote go to waste so ive slowly peiced them together into over 20 tracks on my soundclick page, give it a listen sometimes, thanks for droppen feedback, peace.......

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page...?bandID=401654

hollywoodrealty · 02-11-2007, 05:13 PM

yo noel411, thanks for droppen me some feedback, u are considered one of the best on this site so its an honor to get some nice comments from u, thanks and peace

J.T.S. · 02-12-2007, 12:26 PM

Tight i like your style, the way you put your lines together's real original!

Olive Oil Goombah · 02-13-2007, 07:54 PM

a parrellel universe where everythings been rehearsed
they do what we do but they do it in reverse

Love this line....nicely done, sometimes with concept raps, we wanna cram so much shit in and it flows shitty, but u did a nice job.

hollywoodrealty · 02-15-2007, 05:33 AM

yo jts, thanks for reading this piece, keep your eyes peeled for more of this type of shit, thanks for droppen feedback, peace

hollywoodrealty · 02-15-2007, 05:34 AM

yo nicky tooch, thanks for peepen this verse, ya i was loving that line also, i try not to kill a concept song, usually i dont even set out to make it that way, i just look for a good opening line and then let my mind put it together from there, thanks for checken out this page, peace

02-08-2007, 06:54 AM	#1
hollywoodrealty Da Butcher Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: hollywood, florida Age: 33 Posts: 1,462 Rep Power: 10	Time Machine sacrifice the sacrificial sacraments like a wall street killing spree, shreading up documents dig under the pavement to find our ancestors strapped in transenders like aliens, same gender, nobody's got the answers coffin's are time machines, they beam into galaxy's A higher being gave them amnesty for their travesty its a lost paradox considered unorthodox where u can freeze time and stop the clocks tic toc a parrellel universe where everythings been rehearsed they do what we do but they do it in reverse age backwards, born at 80, die a baby, considered a hero wombs are frozen in at tempatures below sub zero whatever is our destiny, there's no cancelling, u cant void it there's no escaping your fate, u cant avoid it who destroyed the 1st earth and killed the dinasaurs im battling and examining, damn my eyes are sore __________________ but see i gotta get paid fully... whether its truthfully or untruthfully. http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page...?bandID=401654 Last edited by hollywoodrealty; 02-08-2007 at 08:14 AM.

02-08-2007, 03:59 PM	#2
Bigot Hitman "Come as you are" Join Date: May 2006 Location: Cincinnati, walnut hills Age: 22 Posts: 2,165 Rep Power: 10	Good creativity, short verses like these are good cuz your more likely to stay on topic. Nice imgination and new concepts on that, and the flow was never uneven throughout. No metaphors or similes, which is ok for this type of short piece. No multies cept for the closer, which is cool but i would of mixed a couple in their to make it sound smoother. 8/10 __________________ The dealer of hope is selling me lies Reasons to live are reasons to die, in disguise This life was never mine, the rivers never ran Cross your arms, its too late for helping hands Spit your pity elsewhere, there's no sympathy needed For one who's never alive, for one who's never completed (Bigot Hitman) http://www.wutang-corp.com/forum/sho...=25482&page=61

02-10-2007, 06:41 AM	#3
hollywoodrealty Da Butcher Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: hollywood, florida Age: 33 Posts: 1,462 Rep Power: 10	yo thanks for the comments, ya i was trying to stay on focus with the subject, i was high and up late writing this shit, thanks for the comments, peace __________________ but see i gotta get paid fully... whether its truthfully or untruthfully. http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page...?bandID=401654

02-10-2007, 06:49 AM	#4
White N Dangerous LyRiCaL sHiNoBi Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Las Vegas Age: 24 Posts: 1,897 Rep Power: 12	woo da butcher is back !!!! sup man! diggin this! feelin da begging alot! really captivates ya read into staying entertained and wanting to acutally read it. rather then the reader feelling like he is forceing himself to read it. very nice potrayed. stay up keep blessin __________________ Tables Turn..Which Made it Worse, Engaged N' Searched.. for a Way ta' Learn, how ta Take tha' Curse of the Weight of Earth Incase it Curved, and Strained my Nervous System.. Rage it Burst, n' Explained in Words how ta Further Wisdom

02-10-2007, 10:57 PM	#5
noel411 aka Loc Daddy Supreme Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Australia Age: 30 Posts: 2,959 Rep Power: 24	Not bad. A few interesting concepts in there. It read smoothly. Maybe a subject that could have used a little more depth and detail, but not bad for a quick drop. __________________

02-11-2007, 05:11 PM	#6
hollywoodrealty Da Butcher Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: hollywood, florida Age: 33 Posts: 1,462 Rep Power: 10	yo white and dangerous, thanks for stoppen by and showing love, ya i never really went anywhere, i have just been working on audio lately, i didnt want to let all thsoe rhymes i wrote go to waste so ive slowly peiced them together into over 20 tracks on my soundclick page, give it a listen sometimes, thanks for droppen feedback, peace....... http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page...?bandID=401654 __________________ but see i gotta get paid fully... whether its truthfully or untruthfully. http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page...?bandID=401654

02-11-2007, 05:13 PM	#7
hollywoodrealty Da Butcher Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: hollywood, florida Age: 33 Posts: 1,462 Rep Power: 10	yo noel411, thanks for droppen me some feedback, u are considered one of the best on this site so its an honor to get some nice comments from u, thanks and peace __________________ but see i gotta get paid fully... whether its truthfully or untruthfully. http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page...?bandID=401654

02-12-2007, 12:26 PM	#8
J.T.S. God Of WAr Join Date: May 2003 Posts: 4,044 Rep Power: 25	Tight i like your style, the way you put your lines together's real original! __________________ My evidence, my own testament, written on wood Twelve tribes layin at the head of corners in hoods Hell razah

02-13-2007, 07:54 PM	#9
Olive Oil Goombah Anglophile Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: The Big Plum Posts: 21,800 Rep Power: 49	a parrellel universe where everythings been rehearsed they do what we do but they do it in reverse Love this line....nicely done, sometimes with concept raps, we wanna cram so much shit in and it flows shitty, but u did a nice job.

02-15-2007, 05:33 AM	#10
hollywoodrealty Da Butcher Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: hollywood, florida Age: 33 Posts: 1,462 Rep Power: 10	yo jts, thanks for reading this piece, keep your eyes peeled for more of this type of shit, thanks for droppen feedback, peace __________________ but see i gotta get paid fully... whether its truthfully or untruthfully. http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page...?bandID=401654

02-15-2007, 05:34 AM	#11
hollywoodrealty Da Butcher Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: hollywood, florida Age: 33 Posts: 1,462 Rep Power: 10	yo nicky tooch, thanks for peepen this verse, ya i was loving that line also, i try not to kill a concept song, usually i dont even set out to make it that way, i just look for a good opening line and then let my mind put it together from there, thanks for checken out this page, peace __________________ but see i gotta get paid fully... whether its truthfully or untruthfully. http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page...?bandID=401654

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