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Old 07-26-2005, 06:57 AM   #1
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check out this new track. give me honest and constructive criticism.

jus a song for my EP, might record the second verse again

link is in my sig

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Old 07-26-2005, 07:35 AM   #2
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Very very nice lyrics son. A real poetic vibe.
"A lost soul wanders days lone
future spaceghosts... searching faith and hope"

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Old 07-26-2005, 12:21 PM   #3
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Nice beat, could you "sharpen" the drum-line a bit, Shitao? Would hit it in total, then! Good job as always

to Winte: incredible lyrics, you try to speak clearly, nice UK-accent and constant flow; proper quality in sound
I know it's hard but I think you could put more atmosphere in your raps, you know, a bit more aggressive, a touch of transiency
but I like this track, no doubt

The other tracks on your page are decent, too!!
- Young dove: nice vibe you got there
- Way of the shadow: raw and heavy, beat's well produced - the 2nd verse's acca should be mixed again
- Video gamez: again a raw track, good MC feature (graveyard)
- Hope: crazy instrumental, aggressive rap
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I think there's always a 3rd vers missing, these are too short in my feeling
Saying this, I don't want to disrespect you (I'm no better) but I want you to get forward because I like your stuff!
Keep up your style, keep up your text-work, keep up your productions
Those are really underground and fresh - props
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Ahhhhh Word, So Ur The Killa Falcon Dat Worked W/ My Bretheren Graveyard Shifter, Nice Ass Track U Got Here Yo, Big Ups To Shitao On Da Production , Rhymes Is Bangin On Da Real, Mad Deepness In The Words, I Like Dat Shit Word Up. Keep It Comin Yo

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Old 07-26-2005, 03:31 PM   #5
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Very nice and somber, maybe you could distinguish a chorus in some part in the middle, i know its not the final mix probably but just a suggestion, dope tho PEACE
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Old 07-27-2005, 08:14 AM   #6
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this was one of my favourite shitao beats.
killer falcon is one of my favourite mcs from the internet.
the result is great. hehe...really good

-maybe the volume of the beat should be a bit increased. kf's flow matches verry good the measures and everything.
i really would comment more upon this song...but i like it how it is.
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Old 07-28-2005, 08:05 PM   #7
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thanks a lot for the feedback everyone. i'll learn from what you've said. thanks to all who checked it out

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aiyo killer falcon my man! i listen to you a lot dude
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Old 07-30-2005, 10:10 AM   #9
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thanks. uppin

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Old 08-03-2005, 06:28 AM   #11
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For my man Killer Falcon.....UP
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