|03-31-2008, 01:22 PM||#1|
Join Date: May 2007
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a lil somethin
They try to play me like imma marginal rapper
i dont know the origin of these actors but im an original rapper
you got it backwards im a factor in these chapters of this novel
they grovel at my feet like gravel not an apostle far from a saint
but i paint these murals i vandalize expose scandals, lies like paparazzi
in a plane ready to do this kamikaze i've been down an underdog like a pup from aussie
stole they hearts cuffed for larceny but free like a bald ron jaworski
the jaws depict they awe see nobody realize im nice
till its in their face like the real size of the knife that was in the view of the side door mirror
and now its much clearer and undeniable try to fool yourselves as you may
but it will stay as truth and stand stern and never sway i'll never be okay
im great so much you'll think im frosted flakes i'll never stop but these are the breaks
Last edited by theproph; 03-31-2008 at 01:26 PM.
|04-01-2008, 10:41 PM||#2|
Hell Yeah Motherfucker!
Join Date: Mar 2008
Posts: 57Rep Power: 0
I liked. Idk why, but I was reminded of Vinni Paz. Nice imagery, Deep Vocabulary, not really any wordplay but it's good. Work on structure, multis, the other bullshit.