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Old 06-11-2008, 06:28 PM   #16
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so tired
i cant go to sleep
seedz sowed inspired grim flowz of raps reaped
peep the overly optimal weed level in the Optimo
tropical-red optical - the Lord'z sword chops iz droppin hoez
top of your knot got lopped off when the windz blow
you forgot OTB pump shots, what the blood clot-
your momz and pops like willowz weep
you 6 feet - i'm blowin peach philliez billowz sweet
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Old 06-11-2008, 06:30 PM   #17
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Old 06-11-2008, 06:30 PM   #18
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oh yeah^^

nice whers!
what up bro-

yo shizz i peeped your asylum, ill darts-

i saw the pics before the rimez-
sherlock holmez, the graveyard and all that-

nice work bro-

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Old 06-11-2008, 06:36 PM   #19
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Thanks OTB, you've got some mad talent from what I've seen so far. Props

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See if you can comprehend this juxtaposition
of darkness and a revolving prism, wrapped around my mind's vision
submerged into the depths of Hades, smokin' blunts with naked ladies
While a fierce Cerberus with rabies, guards my wealth, and jewels and babies
puffin on clouds with angels, Celestial bodies that nave no angles
and nobody around's a stranger, I feel so tranquil there is no danger
it revolves again and the sun don't shine, everything's fucked and nothings fine
but i'll be iron until when, the sun comes back around again
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Old 06-11-2008, 06:57 PM   #21
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See if you can comprehend this juxtaposition
of darkness and a revolving prism, wrapped around my mind's vision
submerged into the depths of Hades, smokin' blunts with naked ladies
While fierce a Cerberus with rabies, guards my wealth, and jewels and babies
puffin on clouds with angels, Celestial bodies that nave no angles
and nobody around's a stranger, I feel so tranquil there is no danger
it revolves again and the sun don't shine, everything's fucked and nothings fine
but i'll be iron until when, the sun comes back around again
Motivate from the gate y'all B-Rock's in the house!!
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Old 06-13-2008, 09:59 PM   #22
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I don't really fuck wit text rhymes...but i figured i'd comment on this, i'm high and listening to some beats, decided to peep some text rhymes...

First, i enjoyed reading these...i read them with beats on in the background and the verses are full of imagery and in general worded quite well. I figured i'd give you some real feedback in case you want it....I felt both of you guys have a somewhat poorly structured flow, it was hard to get bars on beat consistently..cuz the spacing of ya rhyme syllables is not balanced, some of ya bars are too long and also you got a lotta lines with too many non rhyming words that sorta throw off the flow, try to make a more complicated scheme...you can use more internal rhymes and generate longer multies (mostly 2 syllable rhymes i see, not a lot of 3-4 or even more) and still have rich imagery and dope metaphors, so from a rhyme complexity stand point i think you could do a lot more...having a lot of rhyming syllables in the middle of lines, not just at the end (you have some, im not saying you have none) will help create a cadence, even if you just spit it in accapella...just some thoughts...still good creative lyrics...PEACE
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Old 06-13-2008, 10:14 PM   #23
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Paragraphs infect the minds of young children
supa hero type rest on sky scrapers and buildings
smooth operator i felt it cloaked in red velvet
the blood you smell it Slice the heads off of the mentally dead
im credited with sellin medicine to heretics
the hatchet ive never buried it its in my left
cuz i never do the right thing i aint spike lee
smite me im too sick u catch pnumonia tryna battle me
my goons pack them ratchets they'll blast it
with a black casket to lay down you ungrateful bastards
mastered this artform the darts swarm
and torn your heart warm ive scorned
felt forlorn since i was born and ive never been on the norm
murderous like freddy krueger
carry a german luger despite my user ive disregarded lil ruger
im a shooter lil wayne leave you witta little stain
cuz ive riddled ya frame leave you maimed when i belittle the game
then twiddle your brain cuz ur fickle and lame


lol had too drop a free that was so dope keep it going if u guys want text collabs hit me up.
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the joker/crow linez are straight SPECIAL homey-

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keep postin gemz-
Thanks a lot bro...How you been ?
Yeah I thought it was a bit strange when I came up with it !!!!!
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I don't really fuck wit text rhymes...but i figured i'd comment on this, i'm high and listening to some beats, decided to peep some text rhymes...

First, i enjoyed reading these...i read them with beats on in the background and the verses are full of imagery and in general worded quite well. I figured i'd give you some real feedback in case you want it....I felt both of you guys have a somewhat poorly structured flow, it was hard to get bars on beat consistently..cuz the spacing of ya rhyme syllables is not balanced, some of ya bars are too long and also you got a lotta lines with too many non rhyming words that sorta throw off the flow, try to make a more complicated scheme...you can use more internal rhymes and generate longer multies (mostly 2 syllable rhymes i see, not a lot of 3-4 or even more) and still have rich imagery and dope metaphors, so from a rhyme complexity stand point i think you could do a lot more...having a lot of rhyming syllables in the middle of lines, not just at the end (you have some, im not saying you have none) will help create a cadence, even if you just spit it in accapella...just some thoughts...still good creative lyrics...PEACE
Thanks for the advice...
I'm no Emcee...this is just some fun.
I spat them verses over beats and they sounded fine to me...
But I'll take your opinions on baord and try to work on that.
Regarding too long or too many random words...
I can spit those verses with no problem...
But I can understand where you are comming from
It's hard to judge others "Rhyme-Style"
But next time I spit one...I'll take your thoughts into consideration.

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I don't really fuck wit text rhymes...but i figured i'd comment on this, i'm high and listening to some beats, decided to peep some text rhymes...

First, i enjoyed reading these...i read them with beats on in the background and the verses are full of imagery and in general worded quite well. I figured i'd give you some real feedback in case you want it....I felt both of you guys have a somewhat poorly structured flow, it was hard to get bars on beat consistently..cuz the spacing of ya rhyme syllables is not balanced, some of ya bars are too long and also you got a lotta lines with too many non rhyming words that sorta throw off the flow, try to make a more complicated scheme...you can use more internal rhymes and generate longer multies (mostly 2 syllable rhymes i see, not a lot of 3-4 or even more) and still have rich imagery and dope metaphors, so from a rhyme complexity stand point i think you could do a lot more...having a lot of rhyming syllables in the middle of lines, not just at the end (you have some, im not saying you have none) will help create a cadence, even if you just spit it in accapella...just some thoughts...still good creative lyrics...PEACE
Basically, I write verses on topic. And like whers said, for fun. I don't intend to record. But if you look at it, it's hard to put up twisted images and good flow. To put up images you need various adjectives that sometimes are hard to structure in rhymes. But I try to adapt it to the flow as much as I can.

I feel you on the complexity, and the syllable opinion. English is not my primary language. So basically, I have a lot of time to improve on that.

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I really like to read stuff like this - and I'll contribute - gotta write some crazy Weraziel shit to be on ya level
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whenever a biterz found, i bind 'em in ropes and vices
no hope for their limbz, i'm bringin down 12 inch miter slicez
polo and timz stay spotless, blood runz down the drain

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yo line 4 whers or shizz??

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whenever a biterz found, i bind 'em in ropes and vices
no hope for their limbz, i'm bringin down 12 inch miter slicez
polo and timz stay spotless, blood runz down the drain...



Just Like Your Paper Boat You Wont Float...You'll Sink...And Never Be Found Again
Like My Man OTB I'm "On The Brink"...Of Insanity
Yall Hug The Floor Like A Manatee When I Bring The Catastropy
This Ain't No Fallacy...When I Point My Index...Like RZA I Bring The Tragedy
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Somebody said 'Tragedy'? Some MCs are pussies, so why the faggotry?
Weraziel, crazy as ever, only getting more inhuman and better, sunlight is killing me
so I'm gonna kill the sun, with my shoulder cannongun
and then I hid my mechanical parts inside of me and scare a bum
Armageddon touch, killing all snakes with a Cobra clutch
I allow myself a lot of things, and I don't have any guts!!
I am my own king, I rule the same for all my body parts
and I don't react in the hug of a poisonous tarantula attack
High Definition brutality for ya, my words are sharp
like a double-edged guillotine or the tip of killing darts
I'm possesed, nobody can save me, I spit azbest
they cutted off my head once, BAH, was that their best?
I'm high off my rhymes, cuz extasy disappointed me
I'm an HIV pacient, so nobody can fuck with me
hiphop is a religion, an overdose is the right amount
so I lay my words in catacombs, so they can be found
u can hear my possessed voice, when u read the books
my trophy room show skulls on rusty hooks
I laugh without making noises in a space of endless dimensions
vibrate my voice into waves to crash worlds, I pour attention
chain-reactions, than I make intergalactic battleships
outta fractions of planets, gettin' ready for another hit
gods on thrones are over-thrown, they aren't immortal
to me, I throw them into unknown doom-like portals
barb wires in people throats when they speak my name
I'm greatly known, my fame is inflicting massive pain
I give u a revolver with six bullets at a russian roullette
and show your guardian angel trapped in a cage




get at me, what do ya think?
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