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Old 09-30-2008, 12:27 PM   #1
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Tests
And the answers only raise questions
Pencil broke use the blood I signed for bad intentions
Devil laughs
Echo reaches depths now it’s trapped
Playing every second each second daggers in the back
Pain felt
Piercing glass or a burning welt
Not insane lift my plane towards Orion’s belt
Meditate
His eyes in the sky sees my fate
An arduous path must keep a steady rate
Contemplate
One ideal way to live many ways a neck can break
Calling him my ‘Homey’ a brother’s gentle shake
Crying
Tears erode the skin every time I am trying
Southing the soul feeling better why am I still lying?
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Old 09-30-2008, 12:36 PM   #2
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nice flow-

i like how use the long sentences, that makes for a nice flow-

like i like to write-

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Old 10-15-2008, 10:59 AM   #3
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This was nice flowed like water and visual pretty good , wouldn't mind if you build in my thread.
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